All Comments on 'Breath of Fresh Air Ch. 05'

It's Been Over A Year

Since the the last comment, this series deserves better than that by a long shot. One quibble with way too many authors; "Their egos are so damn fragile." I'm so fucking tired of reading that! Who's ego was so fragile here? It wasn't Mike. It comes up time after time in LW stories and seemingly always After the Woman screws the Guy over and he has a fragile ego. The women don't seem to understand there's a difference between getting screwed and getting laid. Still, *****'s Signed: BTW

Loved the Knoxville location. Go Vols!!

Happy tears. Thank you for making me cry again. :)

LOVE Sarah. Awesome bff!

Nice style easy to follow and yes a nice mix of subject. In the name ocf fun a little more embarrassment on the return to Mikes for pizza but that wasn't the point. I would ask if Katie had a sister, God she knows how to cum how fun for me at least.

Well done!

Nice mix of story, characters, plot and porn!!!

Also kudos for readability! Obvious care was taken in the proofreading, thank you for that effort!

Great story, thank you

OMG!

Great story!!!!

Wanna read mine?

You have a gift, or you are a psych major... Lol

Your understanding of human motivation is quite good.

Please keep writing.

I found your stories. They really are a "breath of fresh air." You nicely tied up the loose ends with Chapter 5. Loved it.

I'm a sucker for a romance story with a happy ending. Panthem, you're the best!

You have a knack for making your characters sound like real people! Also LOVE the way you describe the characters without saying "I'm 6'3" with dark brown hair." We understood that Mike and Katie appreciated the other without having it shoved down our throats. Great story! I will be reading your other submissions soon.

and here I am finishing another of your series! Amazing characters, interesting plots, and unbelievable sex scenes in all of your stories; not to mention honest-to-God good writing! Please keep up the great work.

Who doesn't like a little predictability? I found it sweet and definitely worth multiple reads. I'm going through your work in chronicological order, so this is my first but I'm more than happily on to the next one.

-onxy

Beautiful story, captured the essence and beauty of their spirit... erotic, witty, sensitive, perfect dialogue, Definitely up there with Auto_Erotica series (Madam_Noe), Baby Fish Mouth (Zuzuspetal), Various stories by Wishfulthinking, English Rose series (GoJennGo) as well as various stories by Pepperpace.

Panthem? Thank You for sharing your talent with us.

One other person caught that. I did it twice and I really don't know where that came from, I don't have any other characters in any other stories named Mark. I don't even KNOW anyone named Mark. *shrug* Sorry about the slip-up though. I know that sort of thing is distracting.

As for story similarities...I guess I can see your point. There are certain...elements I like to get in my stories. And this story and Turning of the Stars actually started as one story and I had to split it very early on because my characters were getting schizophrenic and the story wanted to go two different directions (tends to happen to me a lot, I wish I could write choose you own adventure romance). Anyway, I really try hard to make my characters unique and true to themselves. I hope it was more plot similarities as opposed to character similarities you were picking up on. That tendency, at least, I am aware of and know when I'm doing it.

At any rate, I'm glad folks are enjoying the stories. This one, honestly, isn't my favorite because it was one of my first and some of the glaring errors make me cringe. Also, the cheese-factor is strong with this one and I'm really trying to cut dairy from my writing diet. I like to think I'm getting better with each try.

So don't get me wrong, I love you and your writing( I actually spent like thirty minutes looking for this story to read it again cause I forgot the name) but am I the only one who noticed that you accidentally called him mark on the last page? Didn't wreck the story for me or anything. Just kinda funny.

Panthem! Keep writing please! Another fantastic contribution to the annals of Literotica :) Fan for life <3

I don't know if it's just me but all of your characters seem the Sam from the 2 stories I've read. In both the girls both give bj's like a pro and they don't have penetration in the first chapters just masturbation and they break up and get back together. I don't know if that was on purpose but I think on the next story you should mix it up because you are an amazing writer and I like your writing style. Keep up the good work!!!

I am so glad I found your writing. I have been reading stories from Literotica for a long time now and you are one of the best on the site. I never knew how much more turned on I could be with no misspelling or bad grammar to get in the way. Your characters are great and the writing is so witty and sexy. Keep the stories coming!

This story deserves more than a 5. Like the judges on Dancing With The Stars say, perfect rhythm, perfect choreography, perfect timing.

OH My! What can I say....Mike! what a hot guy! And a really sexy story in all! <3

From the Overlook to the Old City ya had me me with you the whole way. Have been hanging around Lit since sometime back in the mid 90's and theres been some Great Stuff during that time. I've had to be careful, living down in the mountains touching Georgia, South Carolina and North Carolina, 'cause the bigots this away have caused me a lot of grief over the years..... so I haven't been as open in my accolades. But this a masterpiece. Thank you, SliperyRox

Just read this story and have no idea why I missed it when it was being posted. Very well written and a realistic depiction of a seriously damaged young woman. You gave her the perfect man, sweet, understanding and he loved her. Once she figured that out everything was going to be OK.

One of my favorites. You have no grammatical errors, no typos, no mispellings (they are a huge turn off!!) and your dialogues are so smart and witty, not to mention realistic. Keep writing!!!

One small tear of joy slips down my cheek.

Thank you, Panthem

NautiNymph

Love this story and a happy ending...

first i loved this story, it was amazing and heartfelt and just what i needed, and i hate to be "that guy" but at one point you said mark instead of mike, only once but it threw me off for a second. besides that, awesome, awesome story!

Lovely ending to a truly enjoyable story!! Thank you!

I loved it! You remind me of Sydney Blake who is also a romance writer here on lit. Anyways great story, I hope you keep writting.

I seriously love this story! It was so beautifully written, I was completely hooked from the first word. I really hope you continue to write more stories and post them on here!

As I said in a comment on chapter 2, you had me hooked with well-written characters in a well-written story. You have carried that through to the final chapter. This is among the twenty or thirty best story-stories I've read in the several years I've been reading on Literotica. Very well done. Thanks.

LitID: Tyro999

Loved your characters and your storytelling! Thanks for sharing it with us!

I'm a little sad that it's over (or seems to be) and I felt like this last chapter went by really fast, but I still liked it a lot!

^_^

I've really enjoyed this whole series.. I guess its a true breath of fresh air.. haha.. perfect ending to a perfect story..