All Comments on 'Breathe Ch. 01'

Well she certainly saved his ass from a miserable life. I hope you continue.

Wow, loved the intro to this story. I hope they cant stay away from each other and end up as a sibling couple and making grandbabies for the parentals. They just seem so in tune with each other and they are closer now than ever. Please keep going.

The only reason I didn't give it a 5 was that they swore they'd never do it or talk about it again, which means they thought it was wrong. Growing up I had a very hot sister and I don't think idea of fucking me ever entered her mind. But it sure entered mine. I'd have done her for sure. I don't like the idea of parents fucking their kids. Oedipus gouged his eyes out for balling his mother even though he didn't know that's who she was.

think his sister should move to where he is at!

please continue maybe have sis visit him after she has a bad break up and...

Hey should slowly be couple in the town of there choice

It might be a shame if brother and sister don't end up together. Could be the start of a great story series.

Good story, but a couple of times you switched from first person to third, and then back.

Definitely 5 stars and I hope they continue and can't keep this just a one night stand

It was good up until the sex scene. The buildup was good, but you took the sex scene wayyyy too fast. Slow it down a little, add some more realistic reluctance, and give some more details.

I agree that this story fell apart once the sex started. You did a great job setting up the scenario, lots of detail there to pull me into the story. And then disappointment. For something that was supposed to be a 1-night thing it should have been memorable with at least as much time spent on the sex as you spent on the buildup if not double. It wasn't quite as bad as just saying "and then they fucked all night" but it wasn't far off.

Pull out...snuggle...go at it again....guess what? He goes in loaded the second time. And the third...and the forth.

There's going to be residual sperm in the urethra....and those little guys are quite capable of completing their mission, given a second opportunity.

Those that didn't escape the urethra have a very short lifespan, and urinating between bouts brings the danger close to zero.

There's actually a word for people who don't understand this fairly simple concept?

Parents.

Great start to a wonderful story. 5 stars

abnormal babies of non related couples 4.9% of incest babies 5%. The abnormalitys are almost nothing mostly to severe, related or not.

Good story, love it. AAAAAA+++++

Ecstasy not extasy. Big spelling errors detract from the story. You have several throughout the story.

You needed an editor

4/5

I'd like to read chapter 4