All Comments on 'Bree Tries A New Flavor'

I suggest you re do this into the first person rather than third person and include dialogue. Get a female editor to put the female touch of reality and re submit. thanks

Thank you for the input. However, I am a female. Don't know how much more of a "female touch of reality" you want from me on it.

Also, there is dialog in the story. Did you miss reading some of the story? =/

Hi Ember, nice story without painting the characters as superstuds etc.. An enjoyable read to stroke to. ;-)

Really liked your story; the sex was excellent. Wish there had been a little more character development but that's just me. Thanks, Blaine

I think you captured the feelings well how someone would feel trying something as new as having sex with someone of a different race. While it shouldn't matter, it's amazing how someone can react to a slight or noticeable difference in something like skin color. Interracial couples are thankfully not as taboo as they used to be, but sadly there are some folks who get bent out of shape over the whole ordeal. You captured someone being introduced into this well.

Possibly work on the dialogue (which is a bitch with me as well) but that's all I can suggest.

A 98 out of 100.

Well written, descrpitive enough to feel like i was the one fucking her. Hot story.