All Comments on 'Brian and Ballet Pt. 03'

I'm realy liking this series. Please keep up the good work.

Yes more pages!! I'm loving the pace of the story!! Please keep writing more!

I hope Emily cums around for Brian and he still sremains frineds maybe with beneifuts with the other ballet girls. Nice pace on the story. Please continue and thanks

wow im loving this series ... good work and i like the pace your taking with this keep it going... it would be nice to hear a little more about brians jack off sessions ... perhaps he cod get caught naked by one of the girls in the locker room ... just a thought... but keep it coming its really good stuff

I thoroughly am enjoying your story, but in this installment I was put off by the grammatical errors. The story is great, but the switches from 3rd to 1st person and some of the other errors eroded it. Please keep writing, but do a little proofreading before posting the next issue. I'll be looking for it with interest.

Jerry

Jerry, thanks for your honesty. Usually I don't do too bad with the errors, but I admit I was probably a little bit more relaxed than I usually am on this one. As far as ratings go definitely give the story what you think it deserves, but I'm glad you backed it up as to why you gave it what you did. Comments like those can only help an author out!

A few places I purposely switched it to the 1st person, as he would be talking to himself in his head...I don't know If I'll continue to do so. I'll just have to be careful about how I go about it and make sure I don't switch it up again in random spots.

Thanks!

I like the story, but it could stand better editing. It could also use better transitions between scenes, as some of them are a bit abrupt.

would be nice if Brian ends up with Emma instead of Emily.

I am enjoying this story. Too bad it is marred by poor grammar.

There is an excellent grammar checker called "Right Writer" that would catch almost all of your errors.

I wasn't worried about the errors...I enjoyed the story as the images played in my head...keep it going..and thank you for giving me something to read that doesn't jump right into a hung guy being the perfect lover...good writing ds..waiting on your next chapter

Transitions and grammar. Really I appreciate you telling me the flaws, instead of leaving comments that just say "You fucking suck!" So my dearest readers, I'll definitely take some time to cover those areas mentioned. Thanks for your honest feedback.

D.S.

I've enjoyed all three parts of the story so far. I've especially liked how you've used stereotypes (Nerds, etc), but have made them characters rather than caricatures.

In Part 3, you changed the narrative's perspective several times back and forth fromthird person ("Brian thought this and that" to first person ("I thought this and that"). A bitaggravating. Were these hints that you are Brian, or are they just sloppy writing/editing?

I also think that your preface to part one, in which you said that the story was "from your sick mind" (or words to that effect) was quite misleading. There has been nothing I've found to be "sick" so far. I'm glad that I read on despite that warning!

Forget about spelling and grammar. You've spun an excellent tale and I for one want more! The characters are likable and Brian's angst and his development have been quite compelling. I'm looking forward to part 4 and beyond.

@ReiDeBastos Sloppy editing. I've gotten lazy, but thanks for pointing that out! :D It will only make me a better writer. I played around with him talking to himself in his head, but clearly it didn't work out for either of us...and the warning from the first part? I think that was more of a few lines to get people interested.

@banjovial Most appreciated! Unfortunately the others are right, and I do need to work on my editing. Glad you enjoy though!

D.S.

YOU'RE A GENIUS ! The length was ok ! The text was so well written I couldn't stop reading ! The rhythm was perfect ! The story was very interesting !

How can someone with so much talent be ? I am addicted to that story ! Not only for sex but for the whole thing ! It's flawless !

One word : Classic !

To me, your story has become a classic !

You aren't quiting on us are you? can't wait for more of your story.

Rest of the story ??? Really nice story ,

When's the next part comming out?

This story is too good to leave unfinished. Please write the conclusion/continuation of the story soon!

Wow. Please write more genius works...

1st comment.. Well spent.

When are you coming out with part 4?

this is awesome, part 4 any time soon?

This story is way too good to abandon it. You got great ratings and lots of good comments. Please don't give up yet! I've been coming back since January hoping there would be a new part to this story.

But no new chapters? It's been months....

I love this story so much. It is so sweet and I hope that you're gonna finish it soon!!

Ch. 3 ended with "to be continued", so please continue it!!!

So you made us all wait for the action and then left us hanging? Typical Lit I guess...

please, i keep coming back to check for part 4

please, you have left us hanging!! finish this ASAP!!

Love the story so far but i am sick of finding great stories on here that just end because the writer just stops writing

My best guess is that a large amount of the good writers on here die in real life cause this guy started this great story over a year ago and hasn't done squat since

I have seen this over and over it is so annoying you find a great writer and they just stop they don't give a reason or anything they are just gone

DUDE!!!!! You have to finish this story. It's the best

Seconded. This is a fairly original and very interesting tale. I'd love to see what happens! :)

This is DS, my dearest readers. I know its been ages but lifes can be quite a bitch. I lost most of my belongings in a flood, not to mention losing my job, shortly after I posted the 3rd part of my story. Ive gone through some trying times, but im getting back on my feet. I hope i can access my login for this site and my email address. I plan on revising this story as soon as I buy a new laptop.

I really hope that part 4 is coming soon, 5/5!!!!

This story is so good, can't wait for you to post the next chap. Please don't give up on it!

This story is a perfect mix of everything I want to read from a erotic story don't let it die !!!

im really enjoying your story I'm sad to see their is no part 4

Please sir can I have some more. (insert sad puppy dog face)

Please add some more

Please tell us what happens because we'd like to know.

This is a great series, but why do u stop? Can u please write more chapters..

Hey DS, it has been 8 years since your last msg. Please continue this story.