All Comments on 'Brian's Story'

a nice story.

make the women pregnant !?!

A problem no one has, but good fantsay.

Can I get Brian's address, I wouldn't mind playing house with his Mom or Aunt.

It seemed to end out of nowhere. Felt incomplete.

Please continue. I agree people should strt showing up pregnant

I wish I could be in this story.

This is one fantastic story. Please keep it up because it is very well written. You paint a fantastic picture. I can't wait for chapter two.

Why did you stop? Please continue. Can't wait to read chapter 2.

too many strands of the story unfinished. Please continue.

That's the subtitle of this excellent contribution. But it's much, much more than that. It's about Brian's big fat dick and it's his own mother's warm wet cunt. It's about Brian blowing his young balls up the same cunt he came out of and flooding it with his creamy semen. It's about the perfect match--a boy's cock and his own mother's twat.

Sooooooo are we ever going to see a conclusion to this story, or are you just gonna leave it at this?

Literotica should start making policy for submitting writers to have a finished work or not being allowed to post. Too many assholes like this one posting stories; which they do not have any intension on finishing, and still are allowed to post another story that they probably will not finish either.

There was nothing in the story description, nor an AU, nor an end note stating that this is anything other than a completed work. Aure it ends on somewhat of a cliff hanger, but the only thing lacking is the explanation of why his erection surged, and to be honest, with the volume of stroke material in this stoey, I don't see how you couldn't be satisfied.

That's an ending???? Bullshit................

WARNING - SPOILER ALERT:

Firstly, I want to say that this is an excellent story. Well written, suspenseful, and extremely erotic and arousing. Well worth reading.

That said, it's not without flaws. While starting out really well, the writing tends to get sloppier as it goes on. The first few pages the reader can easily get fully immersed in the story - everything is well described, but not overly so, leaving enough room for the reader to use his/her imagination to see the story in their mind's eye.

However the more it goes on, the more rushed the writing feels, and the less engrossing it is. At least that's the way I experienced it; I found myself being drawn out of the story as it went on, rather than being kept fully immersed.

And then it just ends!

Like many of the other commenters to this story, I felt cheated. We're left with a cliff-hanger, which would be okay if there was a part 2, but by know it's obvious there will be no continuation. Perhaps the author got bored towards the end and just abandoned the effort; hence the increasing sloppiness as it goes along.

And while I agree, in general, that incomplete stories should not be allowed to be posted, I'm glad to have read this story because it is so well written and engrossing (my negative comments above notwithstanding.)

Or maybe the author did think the story complete and meant to leave it open for the reader to figure it out, both the puzzle, and what might come after. (Sort of like 2001: A Space Odyssey, which ended completely unresolved.)

And now the possible spoiler:

Maybe most of you have figured it out and I'm stating the obvious, so excuse me, but for those that haven't I have a possible solution to the puzzle.

Why does Brian's cock swell to impossible-to-handle proportions during intercourse, but not always?

Is it the woman not turning him on enough? No, that was proven false the second time he fucked his mother.

Was it the Estrogen? No, Claire decided against that as well.

My theory, and the author openly hints at this but doesn't fully explain: it's how recently he's had sex. When he hasn't had sex in a while, he grows to humongous proportions. When he has had sex within the past few hours, he doesn't grow beyond "normal" proportions, albeit still extremely large even by porn-star standards. Pretty simple really.

It would have been nice to have the story continue; exploring the details of Brian's condition:

How long does the drought have to be before he begins to grow beyond his "normal" erect dimensions?

Does he grow larger the longer the drought?

Is one woman capable of providing sex often enough for Brian's size to remain "normal"?

If his condition is finally understood by all parties, can he get back with Kelly?

Is it physically possible for him to remain monogamous with Kelly (or any future partner)? Or will he require other lovers in order to provide sex often enough to keep his size manageable; or possibly he will require a harem?

Will Kelly be open to Brian keeping other lovers? Specifically his mother and aunt? Will she become involved in group sex with them?

All kinds of possibilities to explore...

Perhaps some inspired writer might decide to continue this story-line. Maybe creating a serial, or possibly a universe where Brian is not the only "afflicted" male. If I could write, maybe I would take a whack at it. Credit to the original author, of course.

... My two cents!