All Comments on 'Bringing the Heat'

very real would love to be your Ayu

Manga with out the artwork

This was possible THE best piece of niche fiction I have ever read. I slowly clap for you. This is a sweet and romantic piece. Thank you for writing it.

すっごく面白かったです。貴方が書いた話今全部読み終わりました。日本の方ですよね？話の流れや萌えポイントとかがすっごい日本っぽかったので。こういった女性上位の話は英語圏の感性ではあまり出てこないのが残念でしょうがありません。次回作を期待してまっています。

...gave it 5* anyway. Little hard to relate to, since I'm built like an ogre, but I'd love to have an Amazon like Ayu for my own. ^_^ Good fantasy, though.

Well loved it. :)

is unable to melt or thaw time passed. TK U MLJ LV NV

Though cluelessness was a bit overdone, it was sweet and fun spirited.

J

You write a great story. I loved Christmas Cake. This one is a little sappy and, like other commenters, I'm not a fan of the pov but a good writer like you can pull it off.

L O R

I generally prefer girly-girls, but the emotional connection between them and their past is so sweet!

That story was hot and cute.

ughh soo cute ^__^

I was impressed with your 3rd person narrative, not easy to pull off but you managed. It reminded me of Jay Mcinereney's "Bright Lights Big City."

It's a good story, but honestly Ayu pissed me off. Couldn't she just leave the letter in a more noticeable place? Or just massage him? Would like to see the MC lash out at her, and her being sorry.

I thought the 2pov would be difficult to enjoy, but really it was almost 3p and I sort of read it that way.

So apart from that comment, not criticism, it was lovely and Female Dominant in a really loving way. I am going to look for the rest of your work and hope that you will count me as a fan.

...but where's the other half of the story?! Such a tease, baka!

Part two whennnn

A great story. I can tell you cared and put a great amount of time into crafting a beautiful story. I hope there is more to come.

You do "gentle femdom" better than any other author I've encountered. Thank you for stories with depth, and characters who have wants, insecurities and character development.

You're the best at female domination and romance :)

It's probably the most amazing GFD story I could ever hope to read.

Scenario from deepest dreams!

Soo good I love it

Please add a scene of her fucking his brains out and this story would be perfect

Nice premise.

Good back story/set up.

Nothing with those breasts? And nipples?

No teasing/edging of his cock? And balls?

No making him show her how he adores her body parts?

And she's so tall that she doesn't have boyfriends. How did she learn about sex then?

Four stars.

It started out Ayu was very immature and very confrontational always lightly bullying him,but still within reason.Then she moves and he doesn't see her for 15 years,finally they see eachother but Ayu has turned Amazonian and towers over him.

But still Ayu is shy and meek about her feelings for him.Ultimately him and her are afraid to let their feelings show,but then he finds the note she left for him expressing her feelings for him and races to her game to show his love and support for Ayu.

But the downside of this story is no pokey pokey,and it was not stated if Ayu or Him were still virgins,I wish the author had stated that or not.Finally it would have been better if we had heard about sex and whether Ayu and Him had stayed together and eventually started a family together to make the story more satisfying,but oh well it was still a decent story nonetheless.