All Comments on 'Brother and Sister at the Lake'

So what more could I ask from a Lit story teller?

Nice, relaxed, sexy.

This is a very sexy story of love and romance among family and friends. Great!

Nookiehunter

This was a great story, and while a tad excessive, has all the makings of a great start! Plan on continuing this one, but watch the comma usage. It sorted itself out towards the end, but at the beginning, it was overwhelming. Nice job so far, keep on going!

I liked this very much, just cause your family doesn't mean you can't be in love.

Love the story.

Some parts of it were beautifully written.

Sadly, other parts seemed to have been written in haste. The descriptions of the sex scenes seemed perfunctory.

Comma's: They can be very helpful, or they can be overused. In this case they were so overused I kept having to reread the several words either side of each one, just to glean some meaning from the sentence. It's not an uncommon problem either, I still do it.

Keep writing and bring us more of your thoughts.

We loved your story but the thing I don't like that the mom always gets involved and I don't like when the mom or dad gets involved do you know any stories that are just about the brother and sister me and my sister are really into reading these stories together we have a relationship like this but we don't have kids but we do have a family that support us with our relationship its awesome to get come home and fuck my little sisters pussy all the time its even cooler because we both were virgins tell we fuck for the first time when she turned 18 I'm 26 and she is 23 now

I like non-confrontational stories, but damn that was about as non-confrontational as you can get, lol. ...fyi, fucking on an aluminum boat hurts like hell, and the aches qnd bruises that show up the next day, ugh!!

Overall the story was decent.

Enjoyed it.

Dude your sister and mother sound you got to fuck both and married your sister damn I want to lived like that once

Best brother sister mom fuck story ive ever read off this website AMAZING job amazing

A very lucky family

I read this story and the next one years ago and forgot the author's name and the title and have been looking for it ever since. I am so glad I finally rediscovered it!

I've only commented once before on any story about punctuation. That was about a lack of it. This time all of the extra and plainly misplaced commas made for a frustrating read. I had to stop.

i'm glad you kept it in the family without sex with outsiders

Great story, well done 5 stars

Needs a lot of work with punctuation. Every other word does NOT need a comma, for example. There were also a couple of typos.

Story is interesting though.

Average story. Sex is too simplistic with no build up. Poor grammar and typos.