All Comments on 'Brother Sister Just Wanna'

Don’t bother wasting good pixels on a second chapter until this one is made readable.

This was fairly horrible.

That's 1 of the worst stories I've read on this site in a few years!!!! How old are you? 7? 8? Disgustingly limp dialogue. VERY insipid sex scene. DD cups? Seriously? I'm amazed he wasn't John Holmes reincarnated( Google him) if you know how. BARF

1 star is way too many

DragonRider55

Please, please, please DON'T!

please keep going, I think this could be fun, hot & sexy. Just ignore the anon drongos.

Chapter two has been submitted, I'll see if if bounces for more work or not. Thanks Turtle, I was looking at the favorites and they out numbered the Dragoons

If someone wants to edit the story for a better version Send me a message. I will get with you about an edit and you will be given credit for the editor edition. 🧐

If they care for each other, then they should continue fucking and make a baby.

They both seem to care for each other and they are both mature.

No background, no build up, no story, even the sex scene sucked. Plus you didn't even use quotation marks, something that a 2nd grader would know how to use.

Your story is written well and is so arousing ! To have such a hot sister would be great and a lot of fun. Putting the pregnancy issue aside, Cliff should just eat her out well next time and when she is o aroused, should just slide his hard cock into her wet pussy and just bang her senseless .......... I'll bet that would escalate things !!

Some physical details would be very helpful too. Cannot wait for more, thank you.

You really need an editor.

Sorry...the writing is very disjointed and no sentence structure to speak of. No build-up and tension in the story.

Your story needs to be written with proper syntax and grammar. It is difficult to read and enjoy as it is.

...please don't write more. EVER!

Well that was really bad. You need a remedial English class and an editor. I couldn't finish it. If you get it fixed maybe repost it?

No one, I mean NO ONE writes using No "Quote" indicating a person speaking, and at least let the reader know 'who' is speaking. That's what the sentence structure is for. A space between speakers would be good. I gave up after 5 so called paragraphs. Sorry but I can't give any stars and be honest with you.

He's late 20's and she is mid 20's...WHY are they still living at home??? Must be the biggest losers EVER!

Pretty good idea, but needs conversation. She looked at him and said,” I want ur cock in me, NOW!” Rather than the bland : she said she wanted his cock inside her.

And what idiot girl says “I’m going to fuck my brother, but stop the pill, n if I’m pregnant we’ll just tell our parents n the police?

you seriously need to take some writing classes, no point reading anything you write until you gain some experiences and have a mentor help yout through the process. Really bad attempt at writing.

The concept behind this story has some small, little bit of potential, but a huge number of changes are needed.

First off, your writing is absolutely horrible! You narrated the entire thing! Even the dialog between the characters was narrated!

Secondly, how lame is it for a late twenties guy to move back in with his dad? How worthless is a daughter still living at home in her mid-twenties? 😴

Third problem, after the siblings have sex and Cliff cums inside of Amy she immediately feels something happening inside of her tummy? What the fuck, dude? Are you like twelve years old and writing this garbage?

I'm voting 1/5 on this and every following chapter that you publish. If I can influence the ratings enough to keep them low, then maybe I'll save some other poor soul's time so that they don't waste any reading this crap.

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