All Comments on 'Bunking with Becca'

Part 2?

Hot!

Not much to it. Keep writing and drop the back and forth chatter after all these two had fucked around before, maybe not had fucked but they had the feelings all ready. It was not that bad but please just tell the story and get on with the sex. A reader in Florida

Read this story 3 times and had 3 orgasms. Love it!

Some hair for Jack's muscular, manly chest? It would add to the sexual excitement!

Awesome story…please begin part 2

Nice but deserves a proper second chapter at least, which could also serve as an epilogue.

Nice premise.

But the sex moves ahead much too fast. Needs details. Needs descriptions of exactly what one is doing to the other. Needs dialog about how what he's doing to he feels to her -- and to him. And vice versa.

What does her body look like? Beasts? Nipples? Ass? Pussy? Shaved? Manicured? Hairy?

Needs some teasing. Playing with his cock. Fingering her pussy. Needs not to be in a rush to be over and done with.

Four stars.

Part 2 PLEASE!

her vulva? Seriously? Is he a pre-med student? Or just that lame?

You have a different way of phrasing things - not bad, just different. Just a note, a guy who wears a tool belt at work would take it off before getting in his truck and would definitely not be wearing it to dinner at his mom's place. Overall though, your story was pretty good.

A little rushed, needs some fleshing out, such as the lack of backstory just brushing over that they fooled around in their youth. Too little detail in some important aspects.

I think it’s a good premise as a rough draft, but if it were me I’d consider revising it as a longer tale.

Everyone’s an editor. Your story, told your way.

5*

Tc

So where's the father??!! Was he a one story wonder, just there to claim her v-card!!

So the kids are not the brothers yet in another story one looks just like him!!

IF YOU'RE ATTEMPTING TO WRITE THEM IN SEQUENCE, YOU'RE FAILING BIG TIME

Looks like you have a prequel to read. Nice!! Rose seems like a hot piece of ass.

Pretty hot read. It seems this was NOT the 1st time they had played together although the story seemed a bit vague about that...

This could have easily been a five but for the references to smoking weed and tobacco. The tattoo stuff was too heavy handed as well. You could have been more subtle increasing the incest factor. "Little sister secretly gets her first tattoo, a small rose on her hip that remains hidden by her panties. She shows it to her big brother after their first kiss. It's private and intimate and not just anyone will have the privilege of seeing it."

Having lots of ink and the nose ring was a turn off. Nose rings are for oxen and cattle. 3/5

Nose rings.....ugh!

Body ink.....not for me....

Sex with a horny sister.....GOOD!