All Comments on 'Burned'

Welcome back. Great story.

This is a great story from beginning to end. I hope that there will be a sequel in the near future

My only complaint is the changing first person/third person missteps and the character name changes here and there, but that’s just a minor annoyance in an otherwise well paced, well developed story.

Loved the story but found the grammar errors ant tiny bit distracting though not enough to confuse the meaning. I would encourage you to buy a grammar manual AND use a grammar checker such as Grammerly. I use it extensively to check all my college papers and it is a big help. Thank you for sharing this story and I'll be checking out your others.

it was loving and senseful

Do you ever finish stories or follow up on them?

You have three submitted with decent ratings but each seems like an abandoned tale.