All Comments on 'Bus Ride'

This is a very good and I can see you writing more on it and I hope you do

You know how to write. The characters are believable, as much as characters can be in such stories. The little details of their actions and responses are consistent with their desires, and the eroticism has good pacing.

Great story, really loved it, keep going on like this

please write more. i want a sequel to fuck myself to

PLESE!!! this is SOOOO good, plese write more. can u write the next part wher there in they're bed? nd maybe have anoter family member (mother or father or another sistr or brother) cath them but then climb in to? i want lots of fucking.

i may be a bit late with this comment but i felt like i needed too compliment you on this story.

While i don't usually find girl on girl erotica to be any good (stories like that tend to get dull) yours was different, i couldn't stop reading even if i wanted too. As others have said the way you include details are great, probably the best thing about this story was the details.

That said though i had a hard time beliving how 'into it' the older sister got. Still a solid 4/5 from me. Keep up the good work :)

i am dripping wet write more soon

The ideas of blackmail and "best orgasm in my life" may not be unique, but they're popular because they generally work, and they worked in this story. I loved the tension between the sisters, especially when the older one made good and strong arguments about the situation and the younger one's aberrant behaviour. There was a good opportunity to take that further I think, what they were doing is a perversion after all. Alas, the author chose to take the simple route of making the older one the turn around, another staple of the genre. It worked too, though it was too sudden and too strong, thus returning the story straight back to a simple fantasy.

Still, despite the lingering "what could have been" feeling, good story and well written.

I wanted to give you 4 stars , but some how it stop at 2 , I am sorry

I would to see this story continued

I hope that you will write more

If you know how I change the number starts please let me know

WOW That was great. Are you going to write some more

This is one of the best, I can't find any other like it. Write more with the same theme! :-)

Well to lose your writers virginity in such fashion is akin to losing your real virginity on your wedding night ! In other words , you did it as it was meant to be , perfect ! My only complaint is there’s no other postings from you ! Very talented writer , you are ! Loved your story !