by Jack1107
Sorry to say, but personally i didnt like this one. I love most of your stories.
I prefer your stories with only one man. I could only read a few lines of this story because it was turning me off completely. Certainly not my cup of tea. I don't rate it because I didn't finish it.
Good story. But at some points it reads a little choppy and doesn't flow well. 4.
No draw to it, no build up, the "action" was lackluster, and it barely even fit the genre due to a blurb at the end of the story. This one could use a re-write, 1*
I’m totaly shocked you have comments turned on. Your reasoning was trolls and their comments. Sorry, dude, but thiugh you have some decent storylines, but your writing style begs for an editor and content assist. Not being a troll, just being blunt. Will continue to read you as you do have some super submissions. Not this time
You've got about a one fucking track mind. Are you that obessed with your mother???
I loved your story. I would like to read more about it. Does mom go to Jack that night and fuck him. What happens next? Please continue.
The problem with this story was though it had a lot of potential (I love gangbang stories), it was too brief with not much emotions and descriptions. You could also have continued the gangbang till all five came in all her holes and she had a sore pussy. A sore pussy means total satisfaction. Still the idea was good. Please don't take this as trolling, I'm a friend and wish you well.