All Comments on 'But a Big Dream Ch. 01'

If you want feedback, here's mine: I do like your style and in particular I appreciate your jumping back and forth between dreamy and near-poetic writing and earthy interjections. However, IMO, you really need to pare down and cut back on the adverbs and adjectives. These should always - in general - be used sparingly and there are so many that some sentences are rendered near-incomprehensible and some of them seem a little self-conscious. More words are not always better. Your style is your own. I understand that, but this is merely my opinion.

Thanks, always appreciated! I’m trying to find my voice, and your thoughts are deeply valued.

and I'm so glad that I did.

Yours is not an easy style to embrace, you have to be read slowly and with considerable concentration. But any reader who delights in the sheer pleasure of words beautifully composed and conjured with, there's a seduction here.

And old Zeus, what a fantastic idea!