All Comments on 'Californian Gold Ch. 02'

Still too short, but a little bit better. Add more to the story so the reader can get more interested. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Oh, do you have female boxes alongside your roads?

Or did you mean 'mail' box?

Do you PROOF READ??

just getting hot and sexy between these two. Don't stop now please.

The story is okay but the first two chapters should have been one longer chapter. Also so many spelling mistakes and a few grammatical mistakes. Still I have read a lot worse. Is Dakota on the pill? I hope Alex doesn't have a monster cock? Also mostly people don't call their brothers, "Bro" or their sisters "Sis". Usually best friends get called that. Please don't submit a 3rd chapter until it's done. If you write it well you could get fives.

Again, as I stated on a comment on the first part, they do call eachother "bro" and "sis". Some people seem to not understand, that some siblings do call one another bro and sis. As me and my sister did. And I do not write for everyone. I write what I would want to write. As the great legend Stan Lee once stated "Write for you."

More please, just getting hot and really sexy. I wonder if he and his other sister will get it on too and maybe make some babies.

Wow, what happened here? This needed a lot of work, development etc. So many things hinted at, almost none explained.

Me thinks the author succumbed to Covid because this story never got finished