by cbsummers
You should've written more sequels to this. Characters are so well written and explored.
A porn star is born! I guess after 11 years there's little hope for any more chapters, so sad as the story had great potential. Another very well thought out and written story. I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination (memories?) and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.
Great story with a plot line that keeps you guessing. Well written and hot. Good work!
Good work Sir. The nonstandard character traits of the "nerd" and "popular girl" both avoid predictability and provide many different paths for the story to take. Technique allows unexpected events & great endings. 5 stars... Please keep it up!
Great story! I just found your collection yesterday and have really enjoyed each story I've read so far! Gave each a 4 or 5 star rating. Looking forward to reading more of ur stories soon.
I suppose you aren't writing now, at least not for the Literotica site, but I want to say Thank You for writing great stories for us to enjoy!
I don't know what thrilled me most, that she thought I had a big dick, or that she knew what an ICBM was!
I’m just a regular guy - I hardly ever make comments. But you’re two stories of Rona were so natural and real. I hate porn but I loved you version of it. It should be a movies. You’re a great writer. Are you male or female??
This may sound strange, but there's a certain innocence to this story -- even through all the hot sex. Hope it doesn't end badly for him.
Tell me there is a part 3? Stories like this need a definitive closing...
Is there a latent fantasy involving the legendary gossip columnist involved here somewhere? Fun story, thanks!
What a good ride through this story. Their visit to Rona's home was a surprise twist. Even though she wants out of her family situation and would really like the big bucks of porn, Louis's photography skills could launch her into a modeling career. She could still make the big bucks and so could Louis as an expert photographer. There are multiple paths this story could take. Thanks for taking the time to write. I certainly enjoyed this story.
Made me wish that they actually had a web site to look at for real.
This is some serious adolescent male fantasy stuff (and not just adolescent; up to considerably post-adolescent male fantasy stuff). And I can't begin to tell you how I appreciate an author with a firm grasp of grammar, spelling, and punctuation. For me, at least, nothing spoils the flow of the story like random change of tense in the same sentence or run-on sentences loosely held together with too many commas. At times I am tempted to download a story I would otherwise enjoy and edit the hell out of it. As a matter of fact, I have given in to that temptation a couple of times. Thank you.
Thank you for writing such an intriguing story. Hopefully Rona and Louis will become big time porn stars!
Thanks again!
You need to follow up with another chapter on the development of their relationship and that of the Web site. I know it's been a few years since you wrote this chapter, but it would be good if you could see your way to writing this. The first two instalments were great, but at the moment, this story is just not finished.
This is hot, you need to write more.
Don't leave it much longer , please ?
Really liked it! I think everyone would enjoy a sequel when you have time :D
Thanks!
J. C.
You do need to complete the series, and hopefully with Rona being free of the bad situation she is in.....and ending up as a porn star is not it.
I like the story very much, but, if one thinks seriously about it, it can be sooo sad. They'll be found out and the shit'll hit the fan for sure. With Rona a being raised as she was it's no wonder she's a lovable slut. It was great the way Louis lost his cherry. Cheers!
hi how you doing you need to finish this story it's real good
One of the best stories I've read in ages! Hot sex is great but the falling in love makes it very special. Please continue this series!
Really great one, now I am hooked to the series, it is the best story I read on the site. Please add more to the series, I can't wait.
I'm an old coot so I can say that this tale was naughty but cute. Sorry you're unable to continue the series. Cheers!
This story is sooo hot! It took forever to read..............I was masturbating my clit or thrusting my pelvis while contracting my vagina the whole time I was reading. Bring on the next chapter before I jump some random man's bones!
i loved the teddy bear scene the most. it was so erotic. this is the first time that i am commenting on literotica. please add a sequel. please please please. you are the best. write more on this tale!
These stories are going places that I've never seen in anyone else's. I want to see them, stay together, and accomplish their plans, and somehow be able to be open about being a couple. The only way that I can see Louis taking an active part in the porn would be to wear a disguise (mask, make-up, etc...) because all that it would take is one slip-up in editing to blow it all open.
I was kind of disappointed when Rona was mentioning her Ex's during their interplay; usually that kind of stuff is reserved for quite conversations, but somehow it adds to the kinkiness of what makes them so right for each other.
I'm going to be reading all of the other stories to watch their progress. Cudos ...DKP
Man your stories are simply the best. You find a way to tickle every fantasy I ever had and a few I didn't even know about. Keep up the great work and thank-you very much for the pleasures!
add another chapter--maybe more. This has been a great story since the very beginning. Now we want to learn what happened to these two horny teenagers. I'm willing to bet that it will be good. ...and don't wait forever to post it.
Thanks.
One of the best series I've read in a while. Please continue the series, I can't wait for the next chapter.
You drew Rona in such a way - sweet, sexy, naughty and super horny. A little bit of an airhead, got a shitty life. (I'm in love and wanna rescue her). Please do that for me in your next story and don't break her heart...;)
All the perils ahead, and you leave us hanging.
You have really put the real world in this series - and again, so much potential ahead.
If you ever have the time, please write more in this story. So damn good.
It's wonderful and also more than a bit sad in a realistic way with Rona's home and family. Also, since it is so realistic, the porn business is not what idiots who don't really know what it's like imagine. Now if they simply do their own website and business and not get involved with the asshole, greedy, crooked business types, it might be a lot better.
Anyway, your Rona, is an amazing character, who's got some real dimensions.
Great story. Any chance of follow up?
Thanks !
I really liked the story because it was not just 1 2 3 sock, fuck etc. but had a real plot that was worth reading. Rona is a great and not just a one dimensional character. Plus all of your stories always have a touch of humor. Great job !
Thanks a lot !
Great story. Well written mix of emotions, nudity and photography. Please let our hero use a film camera at least once.
This story was fantastic. Definitely worth five stars. I'll be looking forward to the next installment.
my eyes close my dream begins with rona,she is never out of my mind and sadly it fades as dawn breaks,i try to bring her back but must wait until the night.
I was on the state championship debate team-I knew a kinda Rona I wish she had been kind to me.
Amazing continuation to the original story. I love the twist about her not being rich... Very much like high school, trying to pretend you are something you aren't. And giving her dreams to strive toward. I will definitely be back to check out the follies series.
You need to continue this story and tell us how it goes with the Porn project and how you keep her from having to fuck other guys. It would just be wrong for her to step out on Louis. But they can have a great time with him and maybe other girls, or even get a female teacher in on the action.
Wish Literotica would create a new Underage / Teen category to cater for below 18 sex stories.
You said,"We all know that in the real world people are commonly sexually active at much earlier ages, but it's illegal and even writing about that stuff is illegal!"
So, is rape, incest and other form of non-consenting sex legal? Yet, Literotica still publish them. If people can read and write stories on the other subjects then there is nothing wrong in doing the same for stories on underaged sex. As you put it, it's not uncommon, closer to reality but illegal doing the act, just like rape...
There is nothing illegal about writing and publishing fititious underage sex stories on the net. They're not "underground" or uncommon. It's just that some hypocrites from Literotica forbide this. So, shall we go back to the bible and preach some shit like thou shalt not commit adultery? Then this damn site may as well pack it in!
Someone asked who cares how old characters are. Well Literotica cares! I had to make sure my characters are over 18 or the story would be rejected. We all know that in the real world people are commonly sexually active at much earlier ages, but it's illegal and even writing about that stuff is illegal! But this is fiction so use your imagination! High school seniors are usually 16 and 17. If a reader wants to imagine my characters are a more realistic age, I can't stop ya! But for me, I'd prefer to write about consenting adults. And, hey, I was a nerdy virgin until I was 21, so 18 is plenty young for me! I'd have been thrilled to lose my cherry at 18!
Then who gives a shit whether the characters are 12, 13 or 18?
Both chapters of this story are very well written and you've done great work with the character development. I can't wait for the continuation! Louis totally needs to get over his shyness though...
I laughed, smiled, got turned on, set up my camera. Great story, loved the way you brought out Rona's background and slowly gave The Nerd empowerment. Keep writing
I'm so glad that the underdog scored! Please continue!!!! (Ps thanks for editing your work, it's distracting when stories have a lot of spelling and grammar errors.)
this is one well worth following if you like semi realistic (not way our perverted) fantasies.
"I think the main reason I write this stuff is the rush I get from reading comments."
How could anyone not comment on this great story.
I'm not sure I like the public pornography angle but it is your story. keep up the good work!
Keep up the great work. It's really good to read stories with no spelling/grammar errors. Also a well developed storyline with believable characters.
Continue please.
I had to comment on this series. One of the best I've read here. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Really great story. Gave me a boner the whole time. Your descriptions of Rona were hot and created an amazing illusion in my sick head. She reminded me of a girl I knew in college. Great job dude! I hope you keep on writing. Will be looking for more from you.
of all the stories i read this one actually has a plot of some kind. wanting me to read more more. i hope the ending is not anti-climax. the dude needs more humiliation, cuckold
Seriously don't stop you have more talent than most authors i have seen
Great work! I sincerely hope that you keep at it, this is a great story and well played out. Thanks!!
I hope you stay with it, there are so meny authers that just stop.
I couldn't stop reading! I could relate to the camera nerd well. His dream came true. I was actually sad when I reached the end. Have you ever considered going further with it? After Graduation? As the website starts. Making the money to make Rona's dream come true too, all the while her trusted lover is at her side, loving her more than ever she can know. If you continue it, please keep them together. Give them the happy ending neither one thought they could ever have. Bravo!
This was really good wow I love how u had Rona being the hot popular girl in school while he was a nerd :) I loved it! its now one of my favorites!!!!!!!
Really enjoyed the story and the development of their relationship, and of course the hot antics, please do continue the the next chapter as I would love to see where this leads.
You are an amazing writer. I can't peel my eyes away from your stories no matter how hard I try. I would love to see another chapter on this. Keep em coming
This is so much better than Field Trip Follies. Come back to it and add a few more chapters, please!
Just found your stories and they are badass. They're the closest thing to 'believable' that I've ever read. Your descriptions are wonderful, and the depth you give your characters makes reading the story all the more enjoyable. Your premise is a really cool one - realistic (or at least as realistic as erotica can get) characters, in a realistic setting, focusing in on individual relationships while weaving in background on other characters... shit, you know what you're doing, I don't need to list it all off -- just keep doing it! But I must say... the whole "brother" thing was a major turn off for me personally. Perhaps, if you include any more "taboos," mention it at the beginning of the story? Although it was well written, I think the subject is sensitive enough to warrant a brief note. I'm a reader here, not a writer, so I don't know whether that is common practice. Just a thought. Whatever! I don't comment often because I ramble... obviously. So, TL;DR: your stories are awesome and you should keep writing them!
I loved your story, kinda true to life, nerd gets the the hot chick.
good plot, keep em cumming
I have never felt it necessary to leave a comment before, but this story is great!
This story is absolutely phenomenal! The best I have read in my years here. Well done! Keep this line alive!
Please keep the Camera Buff story going. I love the characters.
How about his parents going away and him staying home. She comes over to stay and do more photos. Sister come over looking for her and one thing leads to a another an they are doing movies etc. of them.
I had a business appointment two hours after I discovered your stories. Blew that off and rescheduled my day so I could read your stories. First time I've ever done anything like that!
I loved this story from the beginning and hope to read much more about these two. Your work is very good and I also checked out your other site and the photos. Again, wonderful work and beautiful photos.
Jill
I kept waiting for them to find existing 'home videos' on the film from his parents' camera
I've never commented on a story before, but I love this series. Well written, hot as hell, everything you could want. Fan-fucking-tastic.
The ONLY thing I'm not sure about is jumping to 'love' so quick, but hey, why not?
Great story, I really felt for the characters and enjoyed the pacing. I can't wait for the next part. Thanks for sharing your work!
The most beautiful, sexxxy hot, stories I've read in a long time. I think when it comes to making the porn part of it you should leave witUh just the two of them. I don't think bringing in anybody else to fuck her would be right. Your story is to trash like that.
This is one of the best stories I've read on here in a long time. And I read a lot.
The characters are so real and lovable. The reader can totally connect with them.
This story has so much potential. Don't listen to anonymous haters. I love what Laurie said on that point. So glad you are continuing this story. Keep going.
Anxiously awaiting the next chapter.
I've read most of the top stories on this website and others and this is the best I have read, the erotic scenes were amazing and the emotions were vivid. The way Rona has been framed and then illuminated and the cliche of the untouchable popular girl were worked masterfully. I can't wait to find out how he goes about with getting the plan up and running and I can see there is amazing potential for some intensely interesting situations. I would consider writing this whole thing up as a book once your done.
I loved the story and writing was pretty good, too! (Not like some that I've seen on-line that are loaded with misspellings. I've seen some that change the name of their characters TWICE within a single paragraph!)
The story has a lot of potential, such as how deals watching and filming his girlfriend making porn, etc. Can't wait for the next chapter!