All Comments on 'Camping Fun'

An interesting way to involve food, sex and the outdoors.

Forget it.

go back to watching tv...lol

I read both of your stories. Literotica offers the free services of editors who could smooth out the rough places in your writing. For example, the expression in your first story is "You COULD cut the tension with a knife." It's a trite expression but saying "couldn't" makes it laughable. A desert is a dry sandy bit of geography. Dessert is what follows a meal. Get an editor. You should keep writing, but get an editor.

... then you should try eating sand.

If you build a whole story around a single word, then you should get that word right.

Didn't finish - far too annoying.

Garbage.