All Comments on 'Camping Mistake'

poorly written, with an obvious lack of Proof Reading!

easy to be a critic when they are anonymous!

good story looking for more.

Enjoyed it overall. The obvious typos and clumsy sentence structure detract from the story. I would like a chapter two where Fred and Kelly become long term lovers. It would also be deliciously naughty if Fred did her one night while they were all staying in same hotel. Let him first have Cindy then sneak out and have Kelly. The forbidden nature and risk gives the scene spice.

Suggest you spend more time fleshin

g out the characters too, build the anticipation a bit before he actually gets her.

Keep writing and don’t let negative people with no imagination make you stop!

Do Bears do it in the woods too? Good read Thanks for sharing.

well that was just hot it's a great read I want more of these three.

Would love to see more to this story, despite the errors...it was a great story!

People need to understand that most people here are amateur writers, it is a bit of fun. It is easy to scrutinise under the cover of anonymity, why not inspire a person to so better rather then try shooting them down?

Good story. But find yourself a proofreader. Or learn the difference between your and you're, quite and quiet, etc...

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