by caughtsinning
Wait, WHAT?
You're trying to cop a feel, you've moved her clothes several times, including feeling her bra, then later you say you're not ready to find her underclothes?
All this and Dad didn't hear a thing???
Well written, I enjoyed it very much. I really enjoyed the description of how he touched and slowly progressed to the more intimate stuff. The description of how he pinched and pulled her nipple was fantastic. I hope you continue with the story, the possibilities of where you can go are numerous.
And how about the aftermath of their sex? Is it impossible that someone else, someone supposed to be asleep, wasn't? With him and his girlfriend, sister, mom and dad, there are a number of possible combinations without leaving the tent.
It was a shame the his girlfriend, father and sister were all struck with temporary deafness. I've been camping and when you're camping on the ground on air mattresses, you never really go to sleep. As such, the amount of noise those two made while fucking would have gotten everybody up.
you need to continue and explain the circumstances of what happened. (ie how did mom get where GF was, where's the GF, what's going on that everyone else in the text isnt awake, if they're awake why didn't they say anything, or is it the GF is with dad cheating on him..)
Wouldn't it have been nice to start hearing his girlfriend responding to his father the same way that mom responded to him?
do come back and had some moire details to the end id like to know more how did dad get on and so on
Good story but no development, either character or plot. The potential is there. No feeling, no love, just sex.
Got lost there and, like Anonymous, confused on the transition (?) tween girlfriend and mom. Still hot.
It was a good story, room for improvement yes but still very good!
Absolutely nasty hot the story was they kept going at it that's the thing I like you f****** to sweat and body