by fukensploogin
A bit of a rambling mess, with walls of text, the first chapter was better. The orgy was narratively superficial with little description.
Princess Bride FTW!!!! You fucking rule!!!! I love you, lol.
~A Fan
I was all wet from the descriptions, and was wondering if there were going to be more. There should be. The sensations, the situations, the sex! Keep it coming!
This was a great story, I've read alot of yours and they are all really, really good. Keep them and me coming! ;)
I don't agree with the previous reviewer. I liked the longer detailed paragraphs. I would like to read more like this from you!
long/schlong.... it was a great read. Loved the music references!
fuken,
Your story was a difficult read because of your super long paragraphs. In future stories you need to do something about that. Also, your story rambles around all over the place.