All Comments on 'Can't Handle a Cocktail'

This so needs to be continued

more please

Poor execution. This really needs some heavy adjustment.

Toilets aren't especially sexy. That's the first problem.

Then there's the way you gloss over the end. That's just shitty writing. Lazy and boring. You should have ended it there and had the details of her fucking the other girls in a new chapter or something if you didn't want to write them there and then. The process of her succumbing to her boss's pressure and letting herself get pregnant deserved its own chapter too.

Instead we get the build-up but most of the meat of the story is just a couple sentences of summary. I've seen how many stories you've written. Clearly you have the ability to expand stories Fix it and re publish because this one deserves better than you gave it.

Pls continue this

Yes, you're right. Sadly, I couldn't give it that treatment. I'm working on several stories at once, and this was a quick one-off commission for a fan. If they decide to commission an expansion on the story, then I'll cover Katy's journey to pregnancy. However, as it is, this is as good as it'll get. I'll keep the epilogue thing in mind when I do future one-shots. If you want another chapter involving the girls that I cut for length, then you can commission it.