All Comments on 'Can't Wait Anymore'

Spell ck?

Lit 101. Give us a sign when you write lit 400.

Minus two

Good story, and/but I suggest you look at the tenses. Many sentences start in the past tense, then switch to present tense. Basically a story either takes place in the past or in the present.

I write short stuff like this. You've got promise. Telling a coherent story is more than half the battle. Your pace was good, a bit wordy at times, in erotic first person descriptions, but, overall, it was ripe with sexual tension. Made me want to be a professor. You'll get better at the grammar. Read your paragraphs aloud, to proof-read your work. It helps.

Thank you!