All Comments on 'Caricature Valentines'

It was a bit mushy to get through, sort of like mud encrusted Wellies, what? However, the story was great, and the revelations just kept coming. VERY well done! Still sad that the fu*king partners are going to walk away scott free, but the children benefit through with that leverage. However, after the final i is crossed and the final t is dotted in the dissolution, several identical flash drives given to the wives by a party or parties unknown... The ex-wife would have zero recourse. Just sayin'.

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5+++/5!!

I liked it but as with many of these stories I wanted to hear more from her. What happened and why? Did she love him at all? 4 stars for a well written story.

Liked it. Lot of charm. Pretty silly, but what's the harm?

You seem very much in love with the sound of your own voice and a great admirer of your own cleverness. Me, not so much.

its funny, this was a 5 star from jump but all the little cuckies are pissed because he dumped a whore on Valentines day......booooo whoooo booooo whoooooooooooooo

Yayyy! Well done! Thank you.

LWlurker

stupid it was just about him not confornting her but more about him made no sense

Great story!

5

Well presented

It was a bit disconnected at some areas.

But the end...well, it ended well for Ken.

But confrontation between Ken and Lydia would have put some drama into the story.

Anyways, nice work Tonyspencer.

Nice twist.

Great story.

I really enjoyed it, but it's a shame it ended there.

Confrontation scenes are always entertaining, but I find the aftermath, where the unfaithful wife has to deal with the consequences of her infidelity to be the most satisfying part of a BtB story.

Good stuff. Full marks. Thanks for posting.

Great story & great setup TonyS. Loved it! 5*

Well done. You really described the feeling of going out in public after being locked down. Fun read and lovely ending. Lydia get’s what she deserved. One of my wife’s and mine favorite pictures is a caricature of us…drawn about 15 years ago.

So, he was married for 10 years. Why is he made out to be an ignorant, sub-par intelligent person when he is meant to be a writer, a journalist, in fact. Obviously not an investigative journalist as he never seems to engage his brain. Then he allows himself to be totally manipulated by numerous people over this Valentine's day anniversary. His wife cheats and manipulates him for years, a group of people manipulate and control him... and he sees NOTHING. Is he also mentally retarded? Just ridiculous.

Clever. I enjoyed it!

ending was too convoluted with zero emotion

It started out slow and lethargic, but actually turned into a pretty decent story.

Great job. Grabs the reader and doesn't let go. Happy Valentines Day loyal ones. SK742

Why change anything in his petition? Adultery should stay. Presentation of all his evidence to the spouses of all participating partners should be made. He and his children are suffering, why not spread that out to cover the people causing it. I never understand why you authors think that's a good part of your story line, never causing the people who destroyed your life any discomfort.

I liked it. Understated and probably far more real than most stories on this site thanks.

First page was dreadfully boring, absolutely nothing happened. She was late, AGAIN, on their anniversary, no less, she's obviously cheating, and he won't even consciously think it.

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I don't see calling her husband "blind and stupid" is in any way derogatory to her. It says that she's attractive, and that he was stupid to cheat on her.

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A little too Deus ex Machina with all the inter-relationships.

excellent story

A wonderful story; most pleasant despite the sad circumstances.

I will be certain to follow this scribe’s future offerings. For this entry, I am most grateful.

I elope rolling up the sleeves for a good “ground-and-pound” BTB, but author tempered the situation with well-placed humor.

Great story. Everyone gets what they deserve without unnecessary violence. I liked the setting being a familiar restaurant, and finding out how the characters were connected. 5*

That was incredibly well done (IMHO)

Sucked me in right from the beginning, and I could feel his pain and frustration through the reading. I thoroughly enjoy getting to read stories set outside of the US. Very nice with the revelations.

I tend to agree with LPN below that at some point in time in the future the partners' wives need to be given a clue.

I hope you write another.

Excellent! Now that’s my kind of BTB. No dead bodies, no whining husbands begging for the cheating bitch to reform and come back to him. Looks like he’s headed into a relationship with some rather formidable ladies!

Good story, a little bit of the Super Man/MI6 scenario. Was hoping for more of an average Joe dealing with life. But this was a very nice read.

Seemed a little too convoluted

I hate how they always say they won't tell the others. Why not ruin their marriages?

What a very proper British way of dropping the hammer on the offending spouse.

Original; I like original. 5*

Brilliant work.

Very clever! In a venue where original plots are few and far between, this was a breath of fresh air. I did think that it was unusually fortuitous that there was an attractive single woman at the next table, but the subterfuge didn't strike me until it was disclosed. The author has the usual "I vs me" pronoun problem, but overall it was a good effort. 4*

That was very fun to read. Well done.

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If there was a single thing to complain about, it would be that the exposition of Lydia’s cheating was not really addressed…nor was the evolution of Ken’s decision process to arrive at what he had decided to do at the dinner.

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But a solid 4 **** effort. More please!

1 Star

Trash.

-26thNC

the slut got just what she deserved

Endlessly tedious.

very original. 5⭐

Well done.

Thank you for sharing.

Good little Valentine tale. I would still burn the law firm down.

Great story, perfect comeuppance for the selfish lawyer wife. 5 Life lived well is the best revenge.

The story was well told if a bit drawn out. Convoluted, of course. No story told like the is naturally realistic however, that is the beauty of a uniquely told BTB story. Good job.

Well done, the setup was near perfect.

Thanks for this story! Would love to see an update though explaining the aftermath. That is the best part of these stories for me, as some others have said.

Definitely a fun read and I almost passed on it.

Good job. But I did miss the violence. Or, at the very least, massive embarrassment! (But he gets to keep the kids.) D

Well done and well written. One of the best stories I've read here in quite a long time.

Loved it - fresh and funny as hell in the end. We’ll done! 5*

Trying to be "too clever" and "too British" you got things so mixed up that it was hard to follow.

Thank you for the work to give us some free entertainment. I very much enjoyed it and it kept my interest from work one to the end. I had no idea that the people around him were anything more than what they seemed to be. Nice job.

Really enjoyed the story. The twists and turns were very interesting. I enjoyed the ending. Thanks for writing.

A very nice story, and well written.

Well written, but totally unreal.

Outstanding, love the surprising twists, masterfully written, salutes.... Lydia's feet were cut off all the way to her knees - masterful.

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The only issue I have is the full Partners will get off Scott-free, They need some pain in their lives for ALSO being cheaters. Maybe sending their wives a copy of the USB stick. Why is it in L - if it is not Doctors/Nurses or Realtors it is over privileged Lawyers/Politicians?

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6*, Hooyah, Salutes....

Protracted start, I waded through it hoping that some of the details would turn out to be relevant later in the story-but they weren't. Improbability piled on improbability at the end. It was tempting to believe that the author was deliberately trying to make us laugh at a farce.

Welcome to the tattered ranks of writers who choose the LW category but can't spell 'discreet'.

Yeah whatever this was meant to be, was a goal never achieved.

What kind of people schedule schedule a wedding on Valentine's Day? That's like saying to all guests, "Any plans you may normally do on this day, give them up to be at OUR special day." Also any anniversary celebrations once again offer the same conflict. No sympathy for either of them.

Im going out on a limb here, but isn't this supposed to be FICTION? I had a fun read, and got to forget the troubles of the world for a bit. THANK YOU!!

Nice twist and good story.

Much enjoyed! 5/5

Enjoyed your story, many thanks for sharing. 😊

lots of fun! thanks for the very original plot twists :)

Good story, but the characters' relations with each other got a little confusing.

This story screams for a part 2. Please stop the screaming and write it!

Wonderful story that makes you happy for the MC. There is life after divorce.

Long and tedious with far too much unnecessary information. And surely requires grammatical editing.

I was beginning to think that the Brits (who also do not seem to know how to spell nor pronounce ‘aluminum’) actually have reversed the two words ‘discrete’ and ‘discreet’! Gotta check my O.E.D. to make sure we upstart Rebels (I live too far below the Mason-Dixon Line to ever identify as a Yank) haven’t screwed it up! Too many other languages have another ‘i’ near the end of AL.

P.S. Thanks for the try at Zulu timekeeping TonyS, but then you shouldna used ‘AM’ for an ‘afore noon’ time!

Excellent story

I liked the story. Well written, funny, with a few twists.

Thank you, keep writing.

@sbrooks103x

First page was dreadfully boring, absolutely nothing happened. She was late, AGAIN, on their anniversary, no less, she's obviously cheating, and he won't even consciously think it. - Then why did he have the divorce papers with him!

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I don't see calling her husband "blind and stupid" is in any way derogatory to her. It says that she's attractive, and that he was stupid to cheat on her. - They both came to that conclusion in the story. You must still be skimming stories.

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A little too Deus ex Machina with all the inter-relationships. - It worked very well. A problem?

This story thread could have been thought of and used for "The A Team". An old TV show of con men ... setting up a con for the general good of who ever was wronged.

I liked your story. It kept my interest. I would of liked to see what happens to the wife and her partners. And a little more with Lottie and Ken

5⭐

The jobs named, are those that are the most likely to cheat due to the hours being so flexable. Nice story, well presented and enjoyed the quick change of the course once the wife showed up.

Nice. Satisfying. A bit contrived, but an entertaining tale of this length needs to be, so you did what you had to do.

You did very well building the sadness and despair Ken felt. The memories they shared capped by Lydia's recent indifference created s sympathetic character. The clumsy parts (the covid sit didnt add anything for example) were made up for. Thanks!

I understood what the author was trying for, but the ending just, IMHO, seemed to contrived. All those people "just happened to be there"? Obviously not, but, for all of them to stick their nose into something that did not, directly, involve them, seems somewhat arrogant of them. Especially as Ken was not familiar with any of them. The way the ending went, other than Ken divorcing Lydia, was off putting. 3⭐s

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Pasqual

Excellent, loved it. 5*****

Creative well developed short story.

Quite entertaining.

Thanks for sharing your work.

Well Done, I always enjoy a happy surprise ending to a story. Thank you for sharing.

Wow. I found myself laughing at the end. You didn't rub their plans in my face and let me figure them out myself...thanks for that. It was a well put together story -- delicious!

Superb story. That's when my heart really melts. A really successful plot! Everything there, everything in. A real rarity among all that crap! 5*!!!

Excellent story, great build up and a fun ending! Laughing to a5* story

This is the first of your stories that I’ve read. If the remaining stories are as good as this is I’m in for a treat. Great story! 5*

A new twist to an old story! Keep writing.

Now that’s what I call a story. Different than the traditional trash written her. A fine piece of writing. I guess you are British,English. Well done.

One of the best stories I have read

Another "process" story. Its usually about cameras and recordings and GPS trackers and phone cloners and all the other tools and techniques of proving what a distant clueless deaf dumb and blind husband needs to scientifically prove: that he actually married an aardvark. Well, how about an arrogant selfish stupid cheating whore, with the morals and ethics of a serial killer. Maybe its just me, but I have always found monstrous deceitful cheating soulless whores to be rather obvious, if you're smart enough to pay attention, and brave enough to accept reality. So the setup and burning was entertaining. Maybe someday you could write a sequel, or addendum, where we get to maybe learn something about the human elements that are missing from this story. Like what turned Lydia into the office slut, why she felt she could and should abandon her marriage commitment, jeopardize her children's loving nurturing family life, betray everything that a wife and mother pledges herself to? Was it the Martians? Or was her doofus husband just to simple timid and boring not to fuck over once she had virile exciting interesting men to stimulate her mind and body? Yes, maybe someone will write that easy simple boring story for us; what makes a loyal loving wife become a promiscuous selfish slut. Too bad its not you. But thanks for the effort you did put out. Loved the tin can; God, devastating!

Great story with great writing! You should be writing books!

There might be hope for the Brits yet. So many stories from the UK are RAAC with no moral backbone. Thanks for the story.

Very British, very civilized, and very good. I really enjoyed this story. What a fortunate man. He gets rid of a cheating wife, a lawyer, and gets a new girlfriend from the gentry all at the same time. Well played indeed.

Brilliant!

Just the right amount of foreshadowing teased by subtle misdirection. I've long been an admirer of Spencerfiction and now happily transfer that to Tonyspencer (unless/until the Powers That Be fix the glitch in the original profile). Some of the anonymous comments lead me to wonder if you irritated some of the cognoscenti, but no matter—they're more to be pitied than scorned.

Really good, wish it was longer. 5*

Definitely a 5 star 🌟✨🌟✨🌟✨🌟✨🌟

Jolly good show, and wrapped up well with a number of good twists and turns you don't see coming like in an Alistair MacLean novel. Great job and best wishes in the contest.

At first I thought that this great story was a bit wordy until I read the last page. Twists, turns, and and ending worthy of rememberance.

Great author returns with fantastic characters in a tantalizing story which reads like a mystery. I think I liked it best when Ken discovers that he had some very special people who will help him face his changing life. This is a story that could have a great follow-up, but I am glad for it just as it was given to us.

The Hoary Cleric

That was fun and a lot more interesting than many cheating spouse stories.

Boy, that took a hard left turn while I wasn’t looking. But a really nice twist. Very good story, Tony, thanks for sharing. 5⭐️s, for sure.

A great read that begs for a sequel.

Great story with a very cool twist.

Good story.

Loved it. A new favourite. Thank you.