by Djmac1031
I like this a lot. They have a very loving relationship. I'll be sad if you don't write part 3 at least
Very good story line, probably has happened more than most think. Would enjoy a continuation...
POV changes result primarily interrupting the flow of a story and breaking the reader out of it. 3rd person is your friend.
Amazing. So close to the Real Thing. If you insist my telling you, I'd have to kill ya!
Don't leave us hanging, this series is one of your best so far.
Why are we waiting....?
DEFINITELY both points of view are working here. I really like knowing what both parties are thinking. You write well--descriptive enough to feel like you are there and can get in on the action too! lol....I would love a 3rd chapter. I hope you feel up to it.
absolute madlad you did it, and you did it perfect. I really hate when the dad perving his daughter or when the daughter is overly slut. But you written it so well it so pure and beautiful. Please finish it, a proper closure for a proper written story.
Super erotic and exciting story.
Brilliant descriptive writing. Just loving this little series.
AWESOME!
Absolutely loved it. I thought the first part was excellent but the second even bettered that. Can't wait for the next part.
Absolutely a beautifully written piece of prose. Especially appreciate the almost total absence of any vulgar language . . . .