All Comments on 'Carly is My Xmas Surprise'

But a second set of eyes to edit it would make it better. Lots of "wrong words" that spell-check wouldn't catch but that don't make sense. Still, not a bad effort, the premise is hot!

bElieve that would be a wonderful experience i would love to have

What more can I say...boing!

THAT REALLY WAS A HOT!!!! HOT!!! STORY!!

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I've had lots of bisexual fantasies too. Your Xmas surprise was wonderful. Wish it could happen to me.

I really enjoyed that one, you should do a few more chapters.

Hope you write more stories like this. thank you

I would love this for Christmas . I have been really good Santa ,please bring a present like this ,please Santa .

I rarely comment about grammar; however the spelling errors and misuse of words was extreme enough to detract from the story and make reading it, at times, a challenge.

Story was fine, romantic even, which I prefer.

Please have your work proofread and edited.