All Comments on 'Carol's Patch Job Ch. 03'

I'm enjoying this series even though I have moral disagreements with some aspects of the plot. Firstly, I think an editor would be helpful. If none is available, then perhaps someone else to proof the chapters plus a good style checker on the computer might work. There are quite a few usage errors that detract from the story's quality. For example, there is a misuse of "too" and "to." "Too" is interchangeable with "also," while "to" is a preposition. Another example is the misuse of "your" for "you're." Example: "I'm sorry Uncle Ben, Uncle Mark. Your part of this family, I love you." It should be "you're" part of this family . . . I could go on and on but I think one gets the idea. So far as the characters go, it seems that Carol is the strong one and all the men are basically weak. I know there are some really strong women in real life, but the stereotypes portrayed by Carol almost seem to be lifted from a grade B movie where only the women kick butt. Jim is of course ill, but he has always sacrificed himself for everyone else (noble but not a strong trait), and he has been clueless about his wife's secret lifestyle, her clandestine money expenditures, and so on. Ben may be rich but he just goes along with whatever Carol wants. Mark likewise. Steve, Carol's brother, is in denial (a sign of weakness). Carol is the only powerful character. Oh, and we must not forget all her martial arts training -- she is going to beat up Marge and Mary -- threatening them to coerce their appearance at a place where she will then beat them up. How juvenile. It's like the "meet me after school" cliche, or the gun duel at high noon tomorrow. Let's not forget that making a terroristic threat is a crime. Let's not forget that Carol is far more qualified to beat up the other women due to her five years or more of training -- it's totally unequal and any such "fight" amounts to assault and battery. All that's needed is for Marge or Mary to arrange for a wire, maybe a spy cam, with police monitoring, and Carol will go to jail for quite a while. In fact, Carol assaulted Mary with her choke hold during the "talk" when both Mary and Marge were "invited" to the home. Carol is perpetrating a fraud and a cover-up of her mother's activities and in a sense, is just as bad as her Mom. One sympathizes with Carol because she is trying to help her Dad, Jim, and Carol of course justifies all the lies, threats, and revenge plans because she wants to keep Jim from suspecting Janice's cheating and other bad behavior. Two wrongs really don't make a right. Violence begets violence and rarely solves one's problems (even though emotionally one might feel better in the short run). I think Jim would have to be totally stupid (maybe that's the author's intent, to portray him this way) to miss all the goings-on. And if and when he later finds out the truth, it will be even worse for him. If he remains ignorant, then maybe we know why Janice got bored and went with her "soap-opera fantasy lifestyle."

Wow, I hope you haven't been savaged too badly in the responses to this story because despite its faults, it does have an interesting and novel premise behind it. <p>

As I read this, I couldn't help but wonder how the family power dynamics would change over time as a result of Carol's solution to this episode. You have reversed the dominance and power structure between mother and daughter which is bound to have some interesting long term effects. What is the result going to be when the daughter and the mother have a fight iover something that the daughter wants to do? Plus, there are bound to be some consequences when the father discovers that the wife cheated and he was kept in the dark by those he loved and trusted most.<p>

But, I have to tell you that I think you dug the wife too big of a hole in this story to make it plausible. From my reading of this chapter, the fact that Janet cheated on six occasions is the smallest issue that this family has to face. <p>

You portray Janet as essentially being AWOL from the family or her parental responsibilities for a six year period. She ignores family needs to blow money on frivolous items for herself. She is oblivious to the sacrifices her husband is making while she is acting like a fool. She is too busy with her friends to take part in family activities. By her absence, she makes the daughter do her job all through her teen years which I am sure affected the daughter's social life and high school experience. In short you portray her as an unloveable, selfish bitch who is an outsider in her own family. Forget about the husband, I can't understand why the daughter or the son are willing to forgive her or give her a second chance. She certainly doesn't seem to be a mother that cared about her children.<p>

Oh well, I guess I'll wait and see where you take the story. Keep up the good work.

Let me see if I have this right

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Carol is so furious with Janice and her 3 "friends" that they engaged in a conpsiracy to destroy Jancie/ Jim marriage and family that Carol actuallu assaults one of them and threatens to beat the shit out of all 3 next week.

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So Carol-and ONLY carol- decides that ANOTHER new massive

conspiracy NOT to tell Jim what Janice has been doing-- is the perfect soluton.

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You cannot be fucking serious

It does seem like a farce/tragedy and any minute reality may come into the room and scare all the elephants! This woman does not deserve Carol, Ben and Mark, and even less so Jim.

But that is the problem with a team sport you have to have confidence in your team mates and he chose a real loser for a mate...

the husband needed to know and needed to make the decision about his life, not everyone else. They all act like they are his parents and he is just 5 years old. This is flawed plot, made worse by this particular plot twist. You are a good writer, but need to work for a little more plausibility in your characters and in the events you portray.

But is still one dumb bitch -

The plan is doomed to fail and since Jim has the feelings he does when he finds out everyone hid it and lied even by omission - they are toast - or ought to be

Nice work though -

He is a lucky man to have a daughter who will do anything to care for and protect her father. Will the cheating cunt wife keep her promise? We'll see...

Five Stars

this has to be the most ridiculous story I have ever (tried to) read. it doesn't even register in the senile or infentile-o meter.

You go, girl.

SHOULD MIND HER FUCKING BUSINESS!!!

CastleStone could NOT have written this story.... or else he didn't write the other story, "SOPHIA", because the two stories are night and day different. This one is an absolute piece of dog shit and Sophia is a very good and well told story. There's no comparison between the two.

I stopped reading this puke about two paragraphs into this chapter when the daughter was looking to put her father back together with her 'smart' mother who got hooked on fucked the big ten inch cock. "Only cheated six times??"... Only cheated with six guys but cheated hundreds of times over six years... enough to get her cunt stretched out so much that her husband couldn't feel her cunt walls when he was fucking her. The ONLY reason she suddenly developed a sense of 'guilt' was because she realized that her daughter had seen, heard and caught on to her description of the big cock that she'd just enjoyed being fucked bareback with again.

Who the fuck would want a mother like that for their father??... or for them-self, for that matter.

I wanna meet Grace!

The part where Carol is trying to fix this marriage is a joke. No way in hell would a real daughter do that to her father.

...and maybe because of that,

entertaining,

5 star story.

Paul in Oklahoma

The age of consent is where they live and if it wouldn't be incest I think he would be better off dumping Janice and marrying Carol. No guilty party is going to get away from her when she's pissed off and baby she's pissed off. Yeah, it's implausible but I'm still enjoying the hell out of it. Signed: BTW

Just switched the safety to off.

Anyone who would keep something like that a secret is just as much a cheater as the person who committed the act.

1) She cheated more than 6 times

Earlier started treating family like shit 6 years ago

She did whole bunch of stuff didn't do with husband

If met only 6 times how many times had sex each time to do all the things she did

Mental and emotional cheating

2) Family already fucked up. Daughter love/hate Son don't want to face truth.

He has to be told after recovery

jtwheels

So, her ‘punishment’ is to be the wife she should have been all along?

Way to go Ben and Mark

You wrote the wife if she was brain dead. She was an adult, she chose to believe the lies and do what she did. She could have confronted him or talked with him. Or even if she didn't want, she could have just divorced him and move on. She was not a victim or an innocent bystander. She was a slut to happen and the two sluts just gave her the push in the wrong direction. Sorry not working for me. Cuck shit.

Carol, Matt and Ben have my vote. can't wait until Carols pounds the 2 bitches

Why are Mark and Ben going to deal with the 3 innocent men who were offered free,no strings attached pussy? Those guys didn't vow to be faithful to Jim, they hadn't abandoned husband and family for years. Why go after them? Man, this story is unraveling fast.

***Thanks for the read.

RAAC incoming

Don't condone want Janice did, but some commenters below have misinterpreted thr story details. Janice cheated six times with four guys over the last 2-3 months, during Jim's last three busines trips. Thr last two were with thr fourth guy, i.e. thr guy, Danny, Marge's younger brother, who she fucked the fourth time, because she really enjoyed the sex and his 10 inch penis , because as usual on this site 10 inch penises are quite common, and a cheating wife has a high probability of running into a guy with a large endowment so far above the 5.1-5.5 inch average length, that their odds in real life are like 1 in a million (e.g. John Holmes was 10.5 inches, Peter North is 8 inches, Lexington Steele, post surgery is 9.5 inches), but of course they are somehow common in theses stories and of course women in these stories become hooked on size, despite 6 to 8 inches being the Goldilocks length in large scale studies of sexually active women from 18 to 55. But hey it is fiction. That being said, though she "only" fucked four guys, six times, also catching and giving her husband syphilis, there is no plausible way that this shouldn't end in a divorce. She drifted and unplugged from her family for six years, living an imaginary life, hiding a ton of her own earned money and splurging on luxury cloths and spa visits, etc during that time, she never confronted her husband about the suspected (though flimsy and falsified) cheating "evidence" turned up by her evil bitch friends Marge and Mary, had decided to burn her husband and divorce him after hitting Mr Henderson's incompetent PI report, did things for the four guys she never did for her husband m, not just wearing sexy lingerie, but a lot of sex acts she denied her husband, and didn't even bother to really check rhe so-called evidence and did not have any trust of her husband or enough respect to confront him. Among other things she has done to her husband and family over the last six years because she was bored. And yet his daughter, son and extended family seek to keep it from him based on an interpretation of a hypothetical answer he was asked about adultery, many years ago by his 'brother' Ben. I hope Jim finds out the truth. Whether he reconciles with Janice or not is up to him, but without knowledge of her betrayal, then remaining together is just a travesty and is disrespectful to Jim, after all he has done for all of them. Now as to reconciliation. Dunno what the author plans, though suspect it will be a RAAC. But I couldn't see getting past this because of especially the fifth and sixth time and her not trusting Jim to really check the so-called evidence or see with her own eyes, and disrespecting Jim with not just cheating but no confrontation before her "elaborate" burn. Marge and Mary are venomous snakes who should be cast out or exiled or worse. The four men are not innocent. They readily agreed to fuck a married woman who had not yet filed for divorce. Janice is obviously remorseful and deeply depressed about her actions, both for the adultery and the six years of emotional separation from her husband and kids. Thr latter just set her up to believe the worst and then perform the nasty betrayal ... six times. Seems like a bridge too far. But to each their own.