All Comments on 'Cassie's Step Dad'

"She felt her organism"...it should be orgasm.

scoot should be Scott.

Many other, too numerous to mention.

It needed proof-reading before posting.

it's possible it could have been a good story (I don't know for sure because I couldn't finish it) except that it was so full of mistakes that I couldn't make heads or tails of most of it. I know it's your first story and I applaud your effort. Please take advantage of the editors who are willing to help. Even authors with dozens of stories use them so it's not an admission of lack of skill. Keep trying.

Seen it many times before, I liked your version.

SO MANY spelling mistakes. After you write your stories, read them to yourself and look for anything that interrupts the flow. With one man in the room you don't have to call him by name every time; write he or him. Use your ' and - buttons properly. Most of these things would be caught by an editor.

You tried, and that is what we really care about.

Continue.

You have talent but need the assistance of a good editor. I stopped reading your story because it was too difficult trying to understand your English. Just a few:

"but please don't be to mean" It should be too mean.

1st paragraph is one long run on sentence. You were trying to set the scene but crammed way too much into it.

"since her mom remarried ..." Whose mom? The reader will assume it is the closest named person, her friend Kate.

Anyway, good luck writing.

ttom

Your content was nice but the errors made it impossible to read. Enlist the help of an editor and you'll have won half the battle.

That made me cum so much!ughh I just really need to be fucked in my cunt and my nipples need to. Be sucked and I want a long cock pounded in me

I liked your story very much and I thought it was a good first attempt in sharing your idea. I suggest using spell/grammer check and even check it again. It is not always accurate either. A good editor helps a whole lot too. Keep writing and sharing your stories!

Great story. I didn't mind the spelling errors. It's only porn!

You need an editor as it was really hard to read. I just couldn't go past few paragaraphs.

Total shite. Learn to write.

You Really need to read your own story before you submit it.

The characters were as shallow and lazy as your grammar.

Good story but almost unreadable with all the spelling and grammar mistakes