All Comments on 'Cast A Circle'

I thoght it was a very interesting story but it needs further editing and refinement. The transitions were not handled properly nor section breaks made properly. The ending was abrupt and, while I think I understood the twist in the story, was not handled well enough to be clear. Nor did it help the story.

- JT

Ruining three pages of a perfectly awesome, hot story in the last few paragraphs...like an aborted orgasm. Boo!

A good tale until the last two paragraphs. A weird twist that made no sense. Much better without it.