All Comments on 'Castaway Forever'

As a fan of the deserted island genre, I really liked the first two-thirds of this story, but found it almost too pat, too easy, particularly with Kailani speaking English, finding salvageable equipment, etc., and with Kailani taking an instant like to Roy. I thought it would have been better if they'd had to work harder to survive, to communicate, and to get to know each other before reaching the certain point. Their ultimate victory was just too easy.

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The last third or so explained why it was so easy, providing answers for the missing hows and whys and it turned out to make sense, but it still left a lot on the table. As a result, this one felt rushed, like quantity over quality and doesn't meet ronde's usual high standards.

Interesting story!

5

Well-written, as all your stories consistently are, but kinda whacky in a lot of ways. The whole terrarium things has of course been done before, and the way you approached it almost makes this seem like two completely separate stories. I can't really decide if I need/like the whole sci-fi part or if it really adds anything to the equation, honestly.

The matrix... Wonderfull story.....

Loved this story, and the twist at the end. Five stars.

Being put in SFF category gave the story away a little, or, at least, left open the possibility of ET involvement. To me, well thought out and executed.

I greatly enjoyed the first part. The ending twist, no. Unlike Ravey19, I hadn't noticed the category. (I follow you, so I went straight from that listing, which doesn't include category.) I didn't find the ending added anything at all worth saying.

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I hope I'll like your next one better. I probably will, based on your stories I've read.

Hmmm, different... not sure if I like it or not - I think I'll let this one rest a bit and come back to it in a month or so to see how it reads then. There's something disquieting about it that I can't quite put my finger on. Possibly it has to do with how many of the stories on Literotica portray the males as clueless dupes who have to be led by the pecker before they can make a move on the females? Something about leaning so far over to avoid being pushy that they fall flat on their faces? Maybe something else that feels just a little off? I'll think on it and get back to you.

Ronde swings...and misses!! This had such a promising start and you morphed it into a freaking Alien Abduction with a nasty end. Sorry didn't like it.

Ended up an average story. Sorry , I enjoyed the beginning but it faded badly at the end. AAA+++

Agree with other comments - good start, good tension points. Ended abruptly. Needs plot work — with both sets of principles.

Willing suspension of disbelief immediately engaged. Quixotic humour. Well written. Well done.

Ok, I read it again and it is really clever. A nice twist on the alien abduction theme - and a well concealed left turn until we hit Pg. 3. I'm still not happy with how long it takes Roy to pull his head out of his ass (good thing Kailani is patient and doesn't have a viable alternative) but that seems to be a theme on Lit - that men are timid and have to wait for their gal to grab them by the ears (or other available appendage) and drag them to bed. 5 star effort.

Was a greats tory and then it morphed into "something"? D

Did the author take some mind bending Hallucionarry drugs?

Destroyed the story