All Comments on 'Caught & Blackmailed Ch. 02'

I like your stories, but you seem to have a fundamental misunderstanding of the proper use of the comma. There are a lot of breaks where there shouldn't be, and it makes reading the story very jarring. It gives the overall impression of listening to William Shatner narrating. "My lads... are not your problem. But... you do have a problem... that we ought to discuss. I'll be back about... 3 o'Clock to talk." You don't actually need any commas in any of that.

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