All Comments on 'Caught in the Act...'

It is a fun story.

Your note in the beginning was an accurate description I'd say. It was a bit fast paced, but I liked the story. Good read. Keep writing!

Was hoping for a longer story but the short story worked just as good :) 5* from me

What happened to the promised Chpt4 of "the secret minivan"????? Last post was april 2020

Sizzling Hot.

Thank You

this was fast paced but I enjoyed it immensely I've read a similar story but that one ended and felt like it was gearing up to a sequel that never happened either way this story hit the mark well

Sorry, Minivan Ch4 is in progress, I keep getting other story ideas that distract me though, I don't want to rush it and not do it justice...

I think they need to get a thousand relatives involved.

So silly

Loved it! Perfect place to end it or write 4 or 5 more chapters. You didn't mention that Lisa and Joe have two daughters away at college,and they will be home soon?? Marcus would love to bred them both wouldn't he? Then there is Uncle Mac's son and two daughters. Whatever, you've done a Great job so far; lts Up to you!

XYZ

Just wanted to thank you for the warning at the beginning of the story.

I wish this was a series

Great story. Thank you

I loved the story Caught in the Act... and wonder if you will be doing a follow up on it? It would be nice to see them start a family and the kids follow in their step

Excellent family love story...hard to top something like this one...

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Just one little correction. I'm seriously trying to help by giving you some useful advice.

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"They caught Clara and I having sex." I replied after a pause, I looked down at my feet."

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This sentence is incorrect. How do I know? 🤔 It's actually very simple. My fifth grade teacher taught me a useful trick for determining whether to use "I" or "me". All you have to do is remove the OTHER person from the sentence. You would never say, "They caught I having sex." Likewise, you wouldn't say, "Me got caught having sex."

So you could write, "Clara and I got caught..." or, for your sentence specifically:

"They caught Clara and me having sex." I replied after a pause, I looked down at my feet."

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Please don't default to the "Name and I" every single time because you’re still going to be wrong about one half of the time anyway. Use my trick and temporarily take the other name out and read it again. You'll find success!

thanks for the warning up top, even though I usually check the tags first. Skipping this one.

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