All Comments on 'Celestial Wars Ch. 03'

By far the best I've read on here. It kept me hanging until the end and I can't wait to read more! :)

Well almost all of it... I can't help but get this annoying jealous ache whenever I think about Cariel sleeping or doing anything intimate with him. I'm really hoping she becomes another demons girl and there is no weird incest threesome between them. I adore your story and I know my words will probably do nothing to influence your writing... But i can't help but hope that you don't decide to make them this trio relationship... I know most girls like myself don't like the idea of our guy wanting another girl let alone our slutty sister... I would be so bummed out to have to turn away from this amazing story because of that... :( my hubby is in the military and I'm a lonely girl in need of a great read!!! Lol please consider slutty sister finding another path away from him<3

I really enjoyed this opening trilogy of the Celestial Wars. I am reminded of the ending of the Fellowship of the Ring, with its mingled tragedy and hope. Sometimes one has to fall before struggling to rise again. As alluded to in the title of my comment, "This is not the end. This is not the beginning of the end. This is the end of the beginning." I eagerly look forward to the next book in your saga.

I was so happy to see a new chapter! As a closure for the first part of this series i think this is a perfect place for it to stop. I have loved seeing seeing the evolution of the main characters and can't wait to see them as they go through the next transformation.

The series is very well written, and at certain points in the stories, I found chances for redemption for the main character Devnik. What ruined it is the ending, where the descent into evil is turned into a triumph, and the failure of redemption is shown as a beginning of a pleasurable sort of evil transformation. I guess the failure in the ending is the lack of regret over the failure of redemption, regret on choices made and opportunities lost. For instance, one of the best moments in the story is when dark tears fell on Devnik's face as he killed those angels, it fell flat when it is conveniently explained afterwards, and resolved in favor of Devnik's evil impulses.

At the end of the day, this story says that good sucks and evil doesn't - no dramatic tension is left over for the next installments. I'm still interested in seeing the next chapters, though - the writing is good, but I hope the inner tension between dom/evil - sub/good is maintained better.

Perhaps I have not made myself clear, but this is not the end of the Celestial series. I thought perhaps my five other comments to that same affect might have gotten that point across.

But after receiving fifteen different emails and two lazy comments written by Anon commentators that obviously didn't read the rest of the board, I feel the need to repeat myself.

The story doesn't end here.

Frustratedly yours,

NT

While this was an interesting read, perhaps you should have ended it after the transformation. I was interested to see what kind of demons the three of them were going to become. So while the series was very well written, the ending fell rather short with me. It left a few too many loose ends for my tastes. If this was presented as just another chapter i would have rated it higher 3.5/5 stars

I accidentally gave this a 1, and couldn't change it. I would've given it a 3. This was a good story, but the ending left me a little flat.

I truly believe every existence...be it supernatural or not...have their own strengths and flaws...even Michael himself admitted it at the end....the way you have portayed every single character..their beliefs,their decisions,their vulnerabilities...is simply amazing!! i seriously hope ypu make a sequel to this amazing journey!!

I am not agree with you, it should not be final part.

No words I could use would do it justice. It hit a soft spot in me!

Loved your writing the flow and continuity were superb. I'm looking forward to reading your other works.

I was awaiting the final installment in this series for a while, and I a glad to say it did not disappoint. My only regret was when I got to the end I realized I had to stop reading! I love the characters, and I loved the plot. I will be looking out for any writings that you do in the future!

I usually stay away from the longer stories (even regular books, I tend to obsess overy details and such) but I love both this series and the Creed series. I have read actual published books that I had to pay for that were not as well written. Seriously I am really truley impressed. If you ever need someone to help you with spelling/grammatical errors (I noticed a few of them) I would be glad to help. This is a really great series and I can't wait to read it through all over again.

Nic

...and I don't even smoke.

Very nice, very nice. And glad to hear there'll be more where this came from. Sign me up! One of my favorite lines: "Like snow white lilies decorating a guillotine."

I'm morbidly curious to find out what Lucifer was up to, with his need for the distraction of Michael. Glad I discovered you, N_T!

An author to keep my eye on, to be sure. :)

Thank you so much for not ending the series

I am very glad to hear that this incredible story is not the end, and I look forward to Celestial Corruption with bated breath.

While I don't think this would make a good live action or cg enhanced movie- this would make an excellent movie in the anime style. I can't even express how much I hope that you can pursue that and find success!

You said that this was the final chapter but I really can't wait for more- more, I hope, that includes some well played fun with Alarial and Cariel and Devnik all together (that was a hint with the blood on his lips, right?).

Very enjoyable!

Anon (Amazing!!!): Thank you. But you have to realize GOT is the reason it takes me so long to write.

Anon (great #2): Well then here is your third. I have actually written two more entirely unreleased chapters of Sweet Blood. However, I think that is a story that I want to finish entirely before posting anymore. I plan on finishing it. For those of you who have no idea, I also post stories on storiesonline. That is where you can find Sweet Blood in its current form.

aisielynn: Much obliged. However, it makes my heart weep that writing that took months was felled in mere days. As to making you feel like one of the characters, that is why I write in the first person. I find that it offers wonderful immersion that I find really pleasing when I'm reading. Creed is very different from Celestial in terms of thematic, also, there is no POV switching to the female characters. It is just all Creed.

Anon (5 stars): Your stars are appreciated. As is your sideways smile. I've already written the chapter about how there transformations pan out...

itsallok: You must be the one kind soul who thinks I post quickly. I try and work quickly, but I've found I can't really force words when they don't want to come. Glad you liked the ending, it took me a while to find one that felt right. I also thought long and hard on how to make chaining someone up a plot device.

Anon (Masterful): Thank you Ton. I look forward to writing them.

More to come from me in the next two months.

NT

Excellent story telling. Good craft and technique. Could and should even be made into a movie. While there is quite a bit of sex, to call this porn is an injustice. Thank you. I look forward to reading your other compositions.

Ton

I know how much hard work goes into quality writing. I can't believe has fast you post you updates.

Your story line is excellent. I really felt the tension. The sex was well done. For once, the bondage was useful instead of purely gratuitous. Satisfying conclusion and great setup for the next chapters too. Nicely done!

I hope you'll continue to explore the grey area between evil and good. What fertile ground for plot twists.

One of the best stories on this site :). Can't wait to read more for this series and how Alarial and everyone elses tranformation turn out. Grats again on a great read.

*smiles* i am extremely glad that I happened upon your Celestial works. i have read them from start to finish in a matter of hours over the course of five days (as time allowed). *grins*

i love the way you have developed the characters and made me feel as if i was one of them, especially Alarial and Cariel. i am also very pleased that you allowed us to see things from Jon's perspective.

i look forward to the next installment of your Celestial works. i will patiently wait because i know that writing such as yours takes time to allow the story to develop the way in which it is meant. In the mean time, i will be sure to check out your Creed storyline. Keep up the wonderful writing! *warm smiles*

tickled i got two responses to my short comment :)

i found your story "sweet blood" which was just starting into the revealing parts of the plot when you stopped updating. might that also be continued? i don't ask for much lol.

good stories :)

I forget that I am reading an erotic story...the plot, the characters, the world, magic, etc. Please continue writing, I almost say this is an HBO show in a making, great balance.

Excellent work!!!

1. Anon (Don't let this be the end): This is not the end. The next chapter will pick up in Devnik's court. You might just see him doing some ruling while he's there.

2. Anon (More): Thank you. I enjoy writing them.

3. Jounar: Nice to see you again Jounar. I'll try and make that a near future, but I'm slow.

4. Anon (Masterful): Not the last. Thanks for the kind words. I hope the NT name continues to amuse and delight.

5. RedJohnny: I try not to think about generes. It makes my head hurt. Thanks for commenting. Nice to see you.

6. Anon (Outstanding): I'm going to the Creed universe next. I've got fifty more pages to write till I post. Check my bio page to see any updates or writing samples I might be offering.

7. Anon (Words): Thanks. I find that writing flattering/humble words to be difficult. Lets agree to a mutual nod of respect. *Nods*.

8. Anon (great): I suppose you could call it a demon saga. No idea when the words will hit the page though.

9. Anon: Thank you. Creed next.

10. Anon (Artful): Thank you. The world building was the fun bit to write.

11. one3nine0: You might be feeling cheated, because I have only provided an ending similar to the Celestial Matters ending. I always planned for this to be a trilogy. This cliffhanger just wasn't as obvious as the other one. Thanks for popping in though, glad you liked the rest.

12. Anon (The end): You will. I already know. But I'm not telling. Muhahahaha.

13. Anon (great): Glad someone's keeping score. I'll be happy when the thing is actually written.

14. Anon: I currently don't have any story written that I feel is worthy of someones money. If that changes, and I self publish, I will let all of you know. Till then, just enjoy. And thank you.

15. bcbbb: Nice to see you again. As a author I know that it is dedicated commenters like you that keep us lit authors inspired. Glad you liked it.

16. Anon (Not nearly enough): I sometimes feel like I am trying to fill a bottomless pit. This is nearly a full length novel. If all three parts of CW were printed, it would fill about 210 pages in a real book. However, I love writing so much I'll see if I can't make things longer in the future. Thanks for commenting.

17. Ashes: Glad no hopes or dreams were crushed on my account.

18. Anon (Anxiously waiting): Wow. That is very flattering. I'll try and keep you abreast of my writings. Write me in author feedback section for samples and such. Thanks for being a fan.

19. Anon (Please more): I will. Thank you.

20. technot: I'll be busy typing the next chapter. I hoping that happens quickly. But knowing my style, it will probably be three months minimum. Sorry...

21. Anon: Thanks for that. However, if you're looking for other stuff that is similar to mine, check out my favorites. LTPC and Backyardbottom slash produce some good stuff.

22. pantsotron: Daniel's character will be returning. I'll give away that cliffhanger for free...but it was probably pretty obvious. I put too much effort into that character to just get rid of him like that. Glad you liked it, and happy to answer a question.

23. Anon: You shall practice patience, and I shall practice typing. Together we shall be marvelous. Thanks for commenting.

-Sorry this comment is so incredibly long. Check my Bio page for updates, or simply send me an email. Now, I have the next chapter open in a tab, and I probably should switch over.

Evilly yours,

NT

I have so enjoyed following this series. Totally worth the wait! Now I will practice my patience while waiting for the next installment ;) Thank you for all your hard work!

Absolutely loved this piece and all of the "Celestial" works you've done. I'm very much looking forward to your next installment. Hopefully it doesn't take too long to crank out!

I'm very much looking forward to seeing Alarial, Carial, and Jon's transformations as well as some more delicious background lore on what that entails and the different castes of demons, as well as some more backstory for our good friends. Speaking of good friends, is Daniel going to be reappearing or was his self-sacrifice a fitting end for a noble man? I'm dying to find out.

This series is the best I have read on this site. Keep up the good work, and don't keep me waiting for too long for whats next.

I continue to stand in awe of the wonderful support this chapter has received. In case you don't want to scroll through the comments, I'll repeat myself. This is not the last you will see of these characters and their stories.

In addition, I'll be answering all the comments on this board on August 1st. So if you have questions, or have already commented here, be on the look out.

Thanks,

NT

Loved the story and will be waiting for the next chapter! Hoping !

This story and world are so enriching I need more. Please noble truth continue this world at some point.

I checked every single night for this story after reading your first. I've read it 20 times. Please please please hurry with the next story I'LL SIMPLY DIE IF YOU DONT and THATS the noble truth! LOL I'm anxiously waiting.

I was hoping it wouldn't be the end!

-Ashes

But then again it never is.You see I have so enjoyed your story that when I finished this chapter, I started the series over again from the beginning just to get the full effect.Let me inform you it was thoroughly enjoyable, even better the second time around. I dearly hope you keep writing such masterful works in the future, and if you can bring yourself to expand on the story of celestial wars, (then short of a few full length novels) what more could we ask for?

This story has been great, and your writing has only improved throughout the series. It was good writing with a great story at first, and now it is phenomenal writing with a phenomenal story. I absolutely loved it, and am saddened that the story had to end.

From,

bcbbb, a grateful reader

Noble T, you are a fantastic wordsmith. The plot, tempo, characters and even the grammar and syntax are all great. Thank you for entertaining us. If you go pro please leave a comment in your bio here.

woot! demon saga to follow :)

so far demon:2 angel:0 ;)

Hello folks.

I've dropped in to let you all know that this is not the end of these characters. The story will pick up in a new series called 'Celestial Corruption'.

I've looked through the comments, and I am touched by the appreciation and support just a day after posting.

Look for more stories from me coming this year.

NT

I hope to find out what kind of demons they become ;)

Still a very good story.

Greetings and thanks,

R2

I liked the flow of the story, the character development, but I felt cheated with how the story ended. A few questions were left unanswered, plot between the sisters ended abruptly, I hope that there is some kind of epilogue or a continuation of the story in the same world.

You transported me into the world of your characters. Thank you so much and please do the favor of continuing this saga!

after re reading all the storys, you write wonderfully and i hope to see another work of your writing again, fantastic!

had a lot of fun n enjoyment reading this. is there a demon saga following? :)

I do not have the words to express how much I enjoy your writing. I, like others, look forward to your future prose.

I check back frequently to read and reread your work. I find myself feeling a twinge of sadness everytime I check this site and there isn't another NT story on the "New" section. Please, do not let this be the end of this cast of characters! You've created a beautiful story, both here and in the Jonathan Creed universe. I'm excited to see where you go next.

Since that's the genre angel/demon stories have been assigned to. This was creative, well written and a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing it and allow me to echo the calls for more.

A masterful way to conclude this series, but hopefully not the last we see of these characters. I will be avidly anticipating any new story with the Noble Truth name written next to it.

Amazing story and then some and well worth the wait. I do hope we get more Devnikolus in the future :)

These stories are amazing, very well written and never a dull moment.

Please write more as these are some of the best tales I have found here.

You are amazing. This was amazing. There was only one sex scene, but I never felt it needed more. You have to continue this story withe theses characters. I want to see Devnikolus rule his court!!