by ncgremlin
At this rate it will take 20 chapters for her to take off her top. You have lost this reader.
Don't speed the story up! I'm loving this as it is! I love cfn m and wish there was a clothed female here right now to watch me stroke to your story!
Did you stay up all night thinking how to write thIs CRAP?
You have
NO RESPECT FOR A BROTHER THAT WOULD DO ANYTHING FOR YOU.
Truly he loved you and loved to be with you. You took advantage of his love.
I wish I had stopped after the first chapter.
I love jerking off my half brother. He gets completely naked and only wear panties.
I don't care if she ever undresses; this is cfnm! It is supposed to be about her power over him. He should never see her without clothes but he could be blindfolded and required to service her.