All Comments on 'Chance: A Day in May Ch. 08'

3 chapters and the story is over and a good one too.

His telling her about the report does not ring true. You had him realizing that it was not a good idea to show her the report and yet he did. A more consistent (with his character) solution would for him to disclose the findings of the report with Gerald. Then he could tell Gerald that he wouldn't share the information with her as long as Gerald agreed to tell her. After all, Gerald did something stupid, and there was at least a possibility that he would go back to is wife if she would have him.

Why is it that, after each chapter, which has its own ending, everyone feels it is the end of the STORY.

To put a stop to this, "There are 12 chapters to the story" Don't despair, if you liked Duncan and Helen's story, I am sure you will care for the rest.

the Troubador

Thanks for another fine chapter. It's such a pleasure to read about two people who are portrayed as innately good and caught in a real difficult situation in which each one is concerned about doing the right thing and especially doing the right thing for the other person. If you're an old fashioned guy, this is developing into a plot where you can cheer for both of the characters. 60 year old George

a pleasure to read and thank you for soothing the fears of your fans with how many chapters will be submitted....look forward to reading on. respectfully fan in Texas naynay

It’s kind of humorous, if this was a loving wives type story this would be the lecher (Duncan) trying to influence the wife to make her belittle her husbands and turn to him for solace. Why he ever had the right or inkling to ask for the private detective investigation was a completely personal act of an intense friend, and he is just an acquaintance of one day when he did this. Duncan is feeding the fire of total distrust and adultery with an incomplete and ambiguous report she doesn’t seem to have read yet. He is intensifying her distrust and manifesting a hatred of the husband by his own dislike of Gerry. Like I said if this was a Loving Wives story he would be the villain for seducing the wife or at least put the pressure on her with his presence and comments. She would succumb to his presence and we would have a cheating wife story.

If she were a loving wife she would be expected to send him away and find her husband and confront him with all this mistrust and suspicions.

Looking forward to the next chapter and see if what we have a loving wives story from the boyfriend’s point of view.

Love to speculate as most of us commenters do. It’s so much fun to speculate as we can’t read ahead with our suspicions and captivation of what’s to come. There is something to be said for long chapters, but that would not be as dramatic for the readers

Great writing and fun reading.

Thank you

the "evidence" so far has shed no credible, much less intelligent, information as to what "Gerry" has been doing.

Gerry could be cheating but we are not so far privy to that information --- other than Dancun's err DD; but Helen HAS CHEATED, we know that for sure.

at this point, the info we've been "given" on Gerry is just Duncan's and the "reputable" agency's

if Helen is as smart as Dancun keep telling her she is, she'd do her own investigation of BOTH Duncan and Gerry and do it smartly without either one of them knowing and see where or how the chips really fall.

but for such a "smart" woman to simply take the big hero back to her bed (if not immediately then the next night or the night after) --- after hearing his supposedly "I don't wanna to tell you the bad new but I must" BS --- before even knowing all the facts,,,,

she must have mud for brains,,, her perhaps her genitals are doing the thinking for her,,, Sounding as bad as it is, Gerry MAY STILL BE INNOCENT for all we know.

Of course, the Troubador/author can MANUFACTURE "evidence" against Gerry and let the old guy/big hero Duncan take Helen. But if the author is fair, he will convey to us what Gerry is doing, has been doing,,,, If he's been cheating, let it be known unequically; if not, he has a right to come home and kick Duncan's ass very soundly, break a few of the old man's teeth, and THEN DIVORCE the cheating, mud-for-brain bitch and don't give her any alimony,,,

Troubador:

It seems like a million years ago that readers of stories would eagerly wait for each new chapter of a story to be published in some magazine or other. They loved the build up and the tension. Now if the story goes beyond 2 or 3 chapters they avoid it like the plague. At least that's what I seem to find in some of my own stories. Keep it up 'cause I love it. Thank You. Ronnie W.

Too long with too much duplication.