All Comments on 'Changing Room Ruse'

The first 90% was great. That ending was rushed though, and a total 180 in tone from the rest of the story. Maybe after she returned to the dressing room for the last time she could have chosen to "help" him finish, then he buys pants, and on the way out she might even allude that it was as much her playing him as vice versa.

I don't comment that often, but I had to say this was a fantastic story. Loved the incredible slow-build, the innocent sexy nature of the girl, and the quality and realistic writing. I also was hoping for a consensual ending where they ended up dating afterwards, or her being fully tricked into completing him, but I didn't hate the ending at all. Very much looking forward to your next story!!

too drawn out.

Completely ridiculous, even for here. But 5 stars for a fun read. REALLY well written, with a wink or two to the reader.

Story was drawn out entirely too long. However the story itself was great - loved the innocence portrayed of Jennifer and when he finally got her on the bench with his mouth on her it was fantastic. But the ending was horrid - he suddenly turned into an asshole who stuck it to her and burned a bridge? And made Jennifer surely feel terrible about opening to this guy in this chance situation. Hurtful and cruel - yuck. I feel cheated by the author too - and it was unnecessary.

Felt like i was reading a erotic novel, in both a good and bad way. Good because it gave you a real feel for the characters, but bad because it took me 1 hour to cum.

I love the slow detailed pace and that it seems so beliaveble and realistic. I really hope you will write more stories.

Wow. Amazing story. I loved it.

but when i do, it's to say this story was extremely well written! suspension of disbelief was in effect for the duration of the story. many times i will start reading a story on this site and after a few paragraphs will skim the setup of the story then begin fully reading at the start of the good part, but for this story i read through to the end, mostly because of your comment at the beginning that "getting there is half the fun."

maybe a bit too many nods to the reader- i think i understand the purpose (to keep the reader engaged during an extended period of lack of sex), but they quite frequently caused me to go back and re-read a few sentences to make sure i was up to speed on what actually happened (because most of these comments were actually thoughts that you find out afterward was a thought instead of speech).

disappointed you've only written one story.

Your story has a great build-up and just the right mix of emotions in it. I don't know if something like this happened to you in real life, but I hope it did.