by astridgray
Might as well have a cookie cutter. Girl marries douchebag and immediately realizes that its her best friend she really loves. This theme is burned out and depleted. I know. I am sure to get the write your own stories. To that I respond be original.
This was over almost before it started! Yet that is a good thing. It was a 'wham bam, thank you both mams' story. I see demands for more, but for me, less is more. Leave it where it is otherwise it will reach into cliche: girl marries wrong person (man), lots of angst along the way, finally girl marries girl usually after running away together Graduate style.
It is well written but you need to take a bit of time so that the reader can get to know the main characters. Look forward to your further work
More, more!!! It would be so good to read the continuation of this story on a more expanded level. Flashbacks to past feelings of longing. Also where do they go from here? Really enjoyed it and hope you’ll write more. I love a slow burning love story!! Much love and many thanks.