All Comments on 'Charlie's Spaceship'

What a wonderful story. Completely enjoyed it. Pleae write more. Great way of showing how what many people value

highly is not really the most important after all.

You have a great gift.

Great story, thoroughly enjoyed reading it. More please.

I've read no more than the first part of your story and, let me tell you, if you could keep up with this originality, you are one of truly few prospective writers who will ever pass through this somewhat haphazard site, on your way to do some serious and creative writing. <p>

Science fiction and any thing that touches on science and other intelligible subjects are my favorite genres, and I sit down to relish THE AUTHOR's creation, if it is done well. <p>

Just your odd heading/title caught my eyes, and as I started reading it, the story jumps out, reminding of the great Asimov's Ugly Little Boy. I'm not saying your are another Asimov; nor do you want to be him. Your TONE --- the easy going way, simplistic way you go about starting a story --- in the introductory part of this story, to me, distinguishes you from most I've read here. <p>

Here are some of the "clues" as well as characters that have made this story endearing from the start: (1) normal people in a stagnated local economy; (2) hardship; (3) a loner who says he doesn't needd money and yet works in a store that doesn't require a whole lot of "brain;" (4) a somewhat abnormal but gentle boy, teenage, really.... who does not use the internet or watch much television but who could write down the periodic table of chemicals in some weird foreign language,,,, a boy who likes a dog both of whom living with two typical average middle aged people on a farm. <p>

Again, very creative writing. I am NOT praising you, at least not yet. But in my eye, if you continue writing and could produce this kind of simplistic-looking, easy going and yet exceptionally endearing story line, you would do well in the future.... <p>

I hope you won't disappoint me, as I dwelve deeper into your little story.... I'll report back and make another set of comments when I finish this little story of yours...

Would make an excellent tv/movie

It's a piece of sci-fi fluff, but I loved every word of it. Keep on writing.

-- KK in Texas

What an engaging story. The writing style could use a bit of polish, and the ending was a bit over done, but it was still a very good effort, and as other posters have said, it's very original. Two thumbs up, since I only have two hands!

I think the ending was over the top a bit. <p>

The fact of the matter is that with such a time machine --- and it is really a time a machine, if you are able to travel faster than the speed of light and could sweep into another galaxy, OR EVEN JUST another part of our large galaxy, and back in a twenty or thirty minutes --- you need not resort to talking about going up to rendezvous with the Discovery or Columbia some 200 miles above earth, to show people you have not killed the boy. No. <p>

Humans are not that stupid. You already have enough evidence: the THREE artificats created and given as gifts to you, and the couple ---- NASA's scientists (physicists and engineers and chemists) take one look at that and they would KNOW IMMEDIATELY they're not made of this earth. <p>

The REASON you, the author, gave as for those 3 artificats NOT being helpful in convincing the local sherif's WAS NOT IN ITSELF CONVINCING. And that was that those 3 artificats do not "work" when someone else use them. Well, really, people, even common people ---- but certainly scientists like physicists, engineers, and chemists ---- would know if an entity is manufactured in a totally alien world, EVEN if they don't know how to "work" it. <p>

The GNERAL RULE OF THUMBS is that if some artifcat is CREATED BY an alien species so advance that ITS CHILDREN uses UNIVERSAL CONSTANTS like the radius of a HYDROGEN atom, etc. --- and all that's calculated in their heads --- for mathematical calculations, NO MATTER WHAT GADGETS they give you, HUMANS are bound to almost-immediately know it is beyond this earth: <p>

From precision design, to chemical composition, to functionality, etc. scientists will immediately understand they are holding some ordinary thing from an extraordinary place/time/species.... 'tis especially true if they have no idea how it works, what it does, how it is put together or how it is taken apart. <p>

My point is: you already have all the "evidence" needed to convince the local police, as well as NASA's folks. There's no need ---- AS FAR AS STORY TELLING GOES --- for our hero to go up to rendezvous with his brother in law in the Discovery/International Space Station, as well as to FIX the damaged Discovery tiles, to convince everyone our hero has not killed the missing boy. <p>

Despite all, I still liked it, especially the first part before you planted too much of your tongue in both cheeks.

entertaining stories I have read for a long time.When they started building the "ship" it reminded me of an old SF story wherea "mentally retarded" boy went to the local rubbish dump every day and bought one item of junk home with him,and arranged it in his yard.Eventually he had all the junk neatly arranged and he then pulled a lever and the junk pile rose into the air,He had invented the first anti gravity machine!!Then each day he took a piece of junk back to the dump until everything was as it had been to start with in his yard.

supremely well done...It is your right to create whatever universe that pleases you..As for human stupidity and refusal of facts, that's also true..Although no government ever would let such a ship loose :)I was expecting you to allow them to change world here.

But it was good.

cheers

Yoron.

Certainly needs polish and the ending is way out in lala land but the premise is original and enjoyable. Exceptional read. Thank you and would love to see more.

I enjoyed reading your story.

Thank you

Nice story, but you should mention that you borrowed the idea of the ship from Carl Sagan's novel "Contact".