All Comments on 'Charlotte's Desires'

Pretty good story line, though there are very similar ones on the site. !!!

The story's ok, but Brad is intolerable.

Didn't do it for me. There needs to be more of a build up. Families don't lust after each other, and if they do they have problems. Try again with another story and be more creative. LAME

It's odd that I've gotten private feedback and it's all good stuff, but the public feedback I've gotten ranks my tale as lame. I feel the need to defend my story for some reason...

Brad is intolerable because he's an 18 year old kid and that's how they act these days.

Families DO lust after one another or else there wouldn't be a thing called incest.

The build up was the characters being developed. This wasn't just about sex, so if that's all you wanted then I'm sorry. This story was about passion and the pent up longing of 2 people that happen to be related.

I don't mean to offend anyone by my comments but like a mother-hen I feel the need to defend my 'baby'.

given two similarly well written stories, the one written from the older person's perspective --- especially if it's a woman --- is usually the more erotic one.

the younger one, esp. if a boy, is usually fuck, fuck, bitch, hoe, blah, blah,,,, but such crude language turn romanticists and eroticists off

it's when such terms are used sparingly by the older woman, in addition to subtle and witty descriptions of circumstances, situations, and personalities, in addition to rich metaphors, similes, etc. that makes true erotic stories romantic and erotic (which needs to be different from cheap blacks on blonde type porn-type "stories", where you read/see nothing erotic but just a big black dick, more like multiple of them at the same time, going in and out, in and out, mouth, vagina, ass, and other possible orifices, with a nastily pasted woman making no other noise but grunts and fake orgasm noises from first to last take; big turn off whether it's a story or a DVD

so you did very well; don't worry about those who want $5.00 porn DVD type stories; they can get dozens of those much more easily than YOU who actually spend some GOOD hours thinking and typing, creating believable CHARACTERS!

Excellent and Awesome!!

Unfortunately many writers feel that it has to be the standard. If you want oversize why stop at 9?

Anyhow that's where I quit reading

Although thats a big shoe its not like its huge. Almost every man in my family wears a 12-15 and none of us are over 6'5" i think youve gotten lost in an urban legond since i for one am most likely avg size. you lost me at that point...girlish dreams are cute but turn-offs.

why stop at 9 inches, if the penise is that important to the writer, the woman, and the men characters?

why not 10, or 11, or 12? how about 14, 16, or, err 23 inches?, where's the err cut-off?,, in the meantime, though, pick up a normal 12-inch ruler and align it against you lower stomach. yes, a penise is made of soft tissues and it contracts as you push into a tight hole, like a vagina, but 12 inches is still a very long thing! and a 13 or 14-inch penise --- without contraction --- would go more than half way into a very BIG female's body!

to me, that is more an assult than an erotic love making!

don't a lot of women, women only, get some sort of a cervical cancer as a result of HPVs (internal vaginal bleeding, due to human papillomavirus, etc.) contributed by these extrenuously punishing sexual engagements?

but then, who's to say, if they think such mighty dicks and the poundings they get from romeo's with them make them happier than soft love making with err less endowed guys who have to learn err techniques, right?! lol

I'm not sure how to take the comments about a 9 inch cock. I wasn't trying to make it sound like he had an enormous tool to tear Charlotte apart with, I was trying to make it believable. These characters are based on real people and this is their anatomy.

Should I have made Brad's cock 14 inches to please one person or 6 inches to please another person?? No, I made Brad's cock 9 inches because that's what the real-life basis for this character is endowed with.

<sigh> Once again I defend my 'baby'. With 'anonymous' comments there is no possibility to actually talk to the person & see what they meant by a statement or what I could do to make it better...

continue story

aunt is only 30 yrs old means that she can have children

so get her pregnate

that would really be great and the nephew brad would

move in and live with her.

with his parents consent

Why have your readers given you low marks? Somebody should tell you.

The story was relatively nice down to the line "Oh God, it is true". Beyond that it read lika a form letter written from a check list. You can do better than that,