All Comments on 'Chloe and Allen Ch. 03'

Suspense is killing me!

Perfect pace, excellent subtly, very tantalizing. Keep up the good work!

Hey NeBaPrivate and everyone!

That's an excellent story so far, I like the crossed perspectives and the slow, but real, progression of the relationship towards more lewdness! They actually help us connect to Chloe and Allen as people and add depth to the story.

Keep up the good work, dude, you're nailing it! And maybe in a few chapters, Daddy will be nailing it too... Given the current trajectory, I'd say next installment should be manual labor, followed by an oral exam and either ending with the main course or going a bit beyond...

Best Wishes,

Visiting and almost anonymous Professor Anon!

It felt as if I was in the room with them you expressed the depth of their feelings wonderfully, looking forward to the next chapter .

Wow! A great love story. I experienced a similar thing with my daughter.

Such love onlycomes once in a lifetime. dp

"Chloe and Allen Ch. 03:" - Eighteen Year Old Virgin Daughter, Chloe and Early Forty's Year Old Married Father, Allen.

The gyrations, stylizations and presentations of clothing, worn by persons at rest and/or sitting while receiving attention from another person at rest and/or sitting, is/was too much, too detailed to fully comprehend. I'm a very detailed person--one that misses very little--but while attempting to read and comprehend minute' details of my favorite genre--incest--got blurry eyed. In the end, the details might matter, at least to the overall context of the story.

The writer/author, 'NeBaPrivate," is a very gifted, talented literary artist. It is refreshing to read a story by someone that takes their work seriously, and is good at the presentation of their efforts.

Daughter Chloe and her Father Allen are aware of their needs and desires, but have fears beyond being discovered; it's as if they know they will suffer some, if any, emotional and/or social scarring, but they're not willing to "take the small leap" for the taste of the fruit! The writer/author knows how to keep the reader on the edge of their seat!

so v grateful 2 find 4 pgs i diddent expect the huge leap forwards (im going to leave that error there didnt enev khow honestly in my minds eye i honestly thought my spelling n finger strokes were correct) with their physical expression huge impact such a gravitating tale Im still stunned n shaking

the included comment u seemingly made to those receiving ur submission(to not change type face n spacing) reflects the comment made on ch3 those intentional effects help paint picture

i dont know how this story is rated wish i could find a 6 star no better than stars so grateful 4 all ur effort n diligence