All Comments on 'Chocolate Coffee Beans'

..for a first effort. I don't know how true the story is but a little more detail about the characters would have been nice. Perhaps more dialogue between the characters next time?

Whilst the characters could indeed have done with a little more fleshing out, it's a promising calling card.

Good start, but needs a bit more dialogue.

Loved the realistic set up and narrative voice. However, you might want to work on the details. 7.5 inches ain't average (women only wish), and one hour is long, long time for anyone to go. But, those are the details you can work on as you pick up some experience

A good start with plenty of scope.

Yes it was my best friends mom,I was totally infatuated with her,she was Austrian and divorced ,what memories.

Too bad you never got another chance at that. What a wonderful experience.

This has to be nearly every young man's fantasy ... well done!

There were a few mothers in my neighborhood, growing up, that I fantasized about. I wish something like this had happened to me with one of them.

This brought back a memory of an older woman, 51, and I was 34, but I got with this well built female during an Ohio CPA school on taxes in the early 70's that I attended in Cleveland. Turns out the female was the mother of the guy my ex-girlfriend had dated during high school and while at Ohio State. Telling me she was going to her parents for Christmas, instead I found air line tickets to Texas. Her old flame was in training after finishing Air Force ROTC and getting his 2nd Lt bars on his shoulders. When we finished our first round and were relaxing, the subject of where she was from and all that small talk ended up in my realizing who she was. I asked if she knew B.S. the answer was yes as she was dating her son. Perhaps so, but I was B.S. first and then got her boyfriend's mom.