All Comments on 'Christian College Sex Comedy Ch. 15'

Kick out a student on false pretenses. Check. Heaven will have a nice lawsuit if she wants.

Theft of property of specific students (akin to racial profiling). Check.

Lose all sympathy in Gorman. Check. High end martial artists usually have honor, guess not. No matter what she does from here, she can not redeem herself to me.

Collective student injuries. Check. So much for this being limited in scope. 40 girls injured is a healthy percentage. Dr. Bass would be fired when all the parents find out.

Eliminate all comedy in this chapter (after returning to the school). Check.

Two movie lines came to mind. #1 That escalated quickly. #2 If they put one of ours in the hospital, we put one of theirs in the morgue.

What's next? Framing the enemy with crimes? The science club can do that.

Val

I promise this will all make sense soon (those chapters are already submitted). I know I use Comedy in the title not every chapter is a comedy. I apologize if I have upset anyone. It certainly wasn't my intention.

But entertining as usual. Think there will be more hilarity soon

I think it had to come to this at some point - just because it's a comedy doesn't mean it would have been a believable story (if Zane the sex magnet can really be believable! - but we all have to suspend our disbelief somewhere), if the authorities hadn't pulled out the stops sooner or later.

So, I'm still loving it. Keep up the great work.

More importantly, I think it's wonderful that youngsters like Rio are still reading Moorcock! On the other hand, I guess Rio's always wanting more cock...

Finalstand I hope you don't take some of the complaints too harshly. I agree with Muskrat in that it was needed for believability. Now granted there is some suspension of belief needed for a story but when you keep a story going as long as you have keeping a sense of reality is needed.

That said while this last chapter was a bit darker, I have loved reading this series and check back daily for new chapters. Please keep it up.

FS, I am really loving your imagineering.

FFU has turned out to a cockpit of seething hormonal intrigues.

And 'Glenda' is the terrier set among the rats.

I fail to understand what the commentators are whining about. This chapter is obviously a plotline development of character interactions to move the story to the next stage of crisis.

Everyone loves being a critic. I am not a writer but I am a reader and I have been enjoying every chapter. As with TV if you feel offended turn the channel no one is making you read any of this. So keep doing your best FS!

I've been reading stories on this site for some years now, first time I have ever come across and Elric of Melniboné reference... Great writing, great story, thanks!

Thank you for your kind comment. I wrote my High School English final's term paper on the Elric of Melniboné Saga so I like occasionally referencing it. Besides, how could Rio not know something written by an author whose name is Moorcock? ;)

Take care,

James aka FinalStand

Everyone knows about a certain gunshot, a certain Arch-Duke and a certain fallout.

Am I seeing similarities? Hrmmm...

JAMES! so good that you are still monitoring your stories feedbacks, and maybe you'll be continuing to add to some of your wonderful works of light-hearted erotic fiction like this Christian College comedy I so enjoy, yeah! Welcome back and I sincerely hope you are healthy and happy! Take care.

I am monitoring my feedback and loving your chapter synopsis so far. Mostly I'm burying myself in my writings - still aiming for the 2,500 words a day plus some editing. This also means I have a backlog of e-mails I need to respond to. Sorry gang.

James aka FinalStand

P.S. I'm getting off my ass and submitting a story tonight.