All Comments on 'Christmas with Sister'

One of the best stories I've read on here in a very long time! I'm sure you'll get comments about it being unrealistic, but that's how it should be some times. It's a fantasy, and everything working out just right can be part of that!

So hot

Yup...it's hot. Hoping for more than pump and run...hot, nonetheless

Lacking credibility of course but fun nevertheless. This however, "sending a stream of her juices flowing loudly into the bowl and causing the water level to rise." is complete BS.

Fantastic hot sexy story, I hope you write more of the fun between these two especially if sis wants a baby. How will they become a couple? Tough ask.

Believability factor, minus ten. Fantasy factor, plus 14. Final score 4.

Would have enjoyed this a lot more with a few minor changes. First of all, she pretty much describes her brother as a moron, start to finish, rather than just inexperienced and shy around girls. Then, near the end, the present opening on Christmas morning, you completely miss the mark. Instead of teasing them both by her getting up to reach for presents as they're handed to them, interrupting the sex and leaving them both wanting more, you take a different route. It could have been a long, slow build-up, with frequent breaks as she slipped off his cock and then lowered herself onto it again without their family knowing. Instead, you give him a miracle erection, able to keep it up and remain hard after he climaxes three or four times inside of her without anyone noticing anything amiss or any break in the action? It would have been 1000x hotter if they had both been edging that entire time, until one fateful climax just before they snuck upstairs to clean themselves up.

Wonderful

Sister is just a little too dominating to be a 5.

I would have enjoyed it better if the brother was an actual person rather than a plot device with a dick.

Your stories are good beginning chapters... Too bad you have never bothered to follow up. 4 Stars though, for the effort.