All Comments on 'Chuck?E-Cheese'

this story was very well written and has a great blend of sex and just life as it is .. it was a story that as hard to stop reading. thanks.

Loved it! Please write more like this! This is a great feel good story! He has the luck we all would like to have.

Thanks for writing!

sexmate

I loved this Story - It definitely happens just this way. Hope it happens to me again soon.

This reminds me of some one I knew so long ago. It was almost the same type situation. RJ ELK

WELL DONE!

That was not only highly erotic it even had a tinge of romance mixed in and wasn't even cheesy as it did so!

I like the way you mixed third person with first person (especially considering I normally hate first person).

Keep up the good work. I'll be looking for more submissions by you!

As someone said before me, the POV was a little distracting switching all the time but I still kept reading. A 4 only because of the POV problem. I will be reading more of your stories.

Great mixture of literature and erotica

An erotic story with escalating pace.There's humanity in the story - not the usual slap bang, thank you for the good fuck, maam ! I don't want to see the end of this story

and would like to read where the single mother offerred her

butt.It would be sexy.

I really enjoyed reading this. I saw that a couple people rated it as a 4 instead of a 5 because of your POV switches. I noticed them, and the fact that they moved a little swiftly into devoting their lives to each other, but it was still a very enthralling story. I like your work.

I Loved "Chuck-E-Cheese," but I'm a sucker for romance. I had no problem following the POV. I have enjoyed all of the stories you've written and once again I wasn't disappointed.

something like this happens often, where a hero comes to the rescue of a downtrodden young lady whose is a single mother, who needs help and a caring man to pick up the baton and help her out.

one of the best I have read in a long time THANK YOU

I give it thumbs up the first time i read this story here i loved it and i still loved it i john marries her he deserves them as a family.

Please continue writing more chapters ok.

Thank You

L.A.Wicker I read this story when it first was published on Literotica and i loved it then and i still love it i was hopeing you would have written a new chapter showing what had happen between John and Tammy and her son did they ever get married ?and what happened to the son you cut off the story when it was getting so good how come?!!

Pat

Atlanta,Ga

Your story was one that many women dream of and only find in one life time thanks for making me realize even men have a gentle side to them

Dreams really would come true! I just love this story. I really wish you would continue this with a sequel.

Thank you for a wonderful story.

Sweet!

Th'POV changes weren't too bad tho disorientin' at 1st

As so many have said- would like a sequel!!

Lovely story,I hope you will go on and tells us all how they have made a family together

Katie in NJ

one well written story, i love the use of situations and it brings back some great memories. keep up the good work.

Give us more!!!!

Man meets woman, charms her, she charms him. They are great together, spend the rest of their life as one. Great story.

I wish life was more like this...

This is a feel good story

Nicely written, in a manor that both fun to read, and hard to write. I really enjoyed this nice story!

Thanks!

But only the good things.

TLC

True love is fucking beautiful and pure!

Well written, great story line and for the majority of it, very realistic. This writer does very well overall but this effort was shorter, more enjoyable to read and for me, I could picture it after my many trips with the grandkids to "The Rat Trap" aka Chuck E. Cheese. Some good looking your MaMas in there quite often, MILFs and even GILFs. LOL

Keep writing the quality stuff L.A. Wicker!!

a lovely story about them meeting and falling in love over a pizza and a fun factory...loved it....

Best story I have read in a while. A live story with a little comedy, a little drama and a true ending.

loved how you wove your story together like your work keep on trucking mature suits you tenbears43

You needed a proof reader or editor. Men use colognes, Women use perfumes. The story could use more character development. 4-Stars. I like happy endings.

I have read some of your stories and I and I liked them but this one I thought was really sweet and if that's what you were aiming for you hit the mark on the head perfectly