All Comments on 'Cindy'

so when is Jennifer going to join in? drink milk from those big full tits? Jennifer gives Cindy and baby girl a brother

Interesting twist with the attorney.

Should have kicked the crap out of Ex.

You need someone to REALLY read your work and edit it. You have skill but your grammar is kind of killing me. There are run-on sentences all over the place, punctuation missing, and words missing. As I said, you do have skill, but you need a good editor to look over your work before posting it. Good luck with future short stories!

I feel like the 1st part of page 1 was ok, showed potential and the last part of page 1 and all of page 2 were just so bad that I wondered if you were rushing to get it over with or maybe someone else was helping you and then they stopped.

There was no need for fucking Jennifer!!

And so rushed, pathetic, were you missing your train!! Cindy and daddy - characters should have been better developed

Its good but somehow i feel its rushed, please continue this series further, wonder how future holds for Dad and Cindy