by WirdSmiff
Very good start to what could be a sexy romance btween these two. Please continue
It's "sotto voce," not "socco voce."
Otherwise, good beginning for a story, and I loved the cheeky by-play between the characters!
You wrote a 5-star story with no physical contact - amazing! More please...
Brilliant story without the physical 'fumbling ' and groping. I am certainly ready for a more explicit continuation. To borrow a little from classical music the story had a very erotic timbre while the motif of nakedness added much to the plot. It was a bit like the "Jaws" theme being so dominant that in only3 notes the specter of a menace appeared. The inevitable coupling needs to be carefully planned to meet the expectation of this masterful beginning. The next 'movement' should compliment this most enjoyable opening to create a perfect symphony of erotica Great Job, I loved it and would read, with great relish, your addition to this tale. 5***** Thank You
He walks home with a heavy coat on because it's cold!
Mother is lying naked in the back garden! ???
That apart it is a good beginning to what could be a good story.
You are tagged as one of my favorite authors. This story is one of the reasons why, and hell yes I am going to part 2 right now.
A good start...... always leave the audience wanting more, & you, Wirdsmiff, certainly have !!!!