All Comments on 'Club Masquerade Pt. 01'

Loved the concept and it was well written. A great read. I really hope we get more.

Interesting plot. I would have liked that I I had a sister. That's another fantasy. What will Part 2 bring? Enjoyed it and I am an old man. At this stage of my life, that's all it is - a fantasy.

Wow hot sexy story. What a build up, I loved it. I do hope we will get to read the story of their lives together raising the baby they just made and maybe another one as well. Hope the family understands why this happened and are not too hard on them or they just move away and do their own thing.

I really enjoyed not only the story itself, but the reading of it. I loved the pacing, and the narrative excellence. The payoff is amazing, and I hope this brother/sister has many more adventures together. This story is why I love this website.

I understand the difficulty involved in editing your own stories. You read what you think it says, what you meant to say. You miss the sentence fragments, dangling participle phrases, the misplaced and extra commas.

It's also not easy to find a volunteer editor. Most don't even reply to your email. If other editors have similar experience to mine, it's more difficult and time consuming to edit than to write, and it's easy to suddenly have material backed up on your 'desk'.

It helps to put it down and let it set, a day or two, then read it with fresh eyes. You'll catch a lot.

I'm not saying your writing is bad, it's good, but could be better with better grammar.

I loved the story. I gave it 5 stars and would give it 10 if I could. However, just to nit-pick, I get that it's fantasy or fiction, whatever you want to call it, but a brother would recognize his sister's voice and she would recognize his. They would know who the other person was with the first words out of her mouth. Of course, if you wrote it this way then the story would have ended way too soon.

Thanks for that sexy cute and oh so well written erotic story.

This story would be impressive coming from a talented, seasoned writer but for a newbie it's awesome. Don't be bothered by grammar police, or those who may not like the theme, because the story really hits the mark on eroticism. Yes, the ending is predictable but just anticipating it was delicious (I was dripping by then). Thanks for sharing your "fertile" imagination and please keep on doing so.

One of the best Brother/Sister stories.

Please. Please continue the story.

This was AWESOME!

Enjoyed it thoroughly. Nice pace, great conclusion. I don't need a continuance of this story and liked how you finished it, light and hopeful.

There were grammatical errors, but as one commenter stated, difficult to self edit. Letting a manuscript sit for a while then reading while looking for issues really does help. After all, we are all amateurs here.

I appreciate your effort, thanks.

You did a great job. Keep up the good work and nevermind the grammar naysayers.

I was a little annoyed that you kept saying "HIM" and "HER" even though it was obvious who these people were talking about. Otherwise, it was really good. I'm looking forward to the next part.

I was afraid they would find out and go mental about actually having incestuous sex. It was a relief that it ended well.

There were some critical comments made but I have to say I didn't notice anything, grammatical or otherwise except a typo or two. You did a pretty good job and I enjoyed the story very much.

This story stands alone very well and I will imagine what the future holds for this couple. I like using my imagination in this way, but if you continue it as your title suggests I will most certainly read it. Thank you.

After they discovered each other did they continue to be members of the club? Did the sis still keep being a whore or did she settle down? Did brother stay faithful to his sis or did he keep fucking all the girls he could at college? Didn't much care for the sis being a prostitute angle so didn't get into the story but doesn't mean wasn't a good story to others just not into the women being whores in the stories I read.

this term has been used by a number of writers.

A devil in "underpants".

This is a term that most would associate with pre-teens. One would expect terms such as, briefs, boxers, shorts, etc to be used by an adult.

Liked it, good story. A nice feel and touch about it

Scores 5/5

FANTASTIC Masked Ball

AWESOME

I was stiff and loved it,

Can’t wait for the next chapter!!!!

plenty more story. don't end it there.

Decided to give your earlier work a shot after reading what is available from your In The Cards series. I’m not at all disappointed, although I can clearly see your progression as an author. Very enjoyable work. Keep it up.

Will there be a pt. 2?

AWESOME

Fabulous story.

Exciting each time I read the story.

Totally amazing story.

4* only because it seems like yet another Lit story that 4 years on will never get finished. If the parents and other family were never going to interact in the aftermath of the couple consummating their incestuous union then why bother wasting nearly half the pages with their thoughts and words. A single quick paragraph was enough to establish all that as backstory.

loved it

Amazing story. Hope to see the next part soon.

They recognized the voices right away. You could had lines saying that they thought the fantasy was so intense that were hearing the voice of the one they desired. It was an excellent story otherwise. I particularly liked that the sister was oozing early in sex. Woman secrete to make sex more comfortable and enjoyable. Too many stories only have the juice at the end as if they were ejaculating like men. It seems like you may know something about sex. I wonder how many men stop when the juice comes and leave their partner without the orgasm. Thank you.