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AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

The story does seem rushed, especially with how the buildup was going.

It seems like someone got to the interesting part and didn't want to actually write it in depth..

Try making it more detailed, at least double the length of the buildup and write the full action scene without rushing it.

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Hi, My name is Cindy: I hope you enjoy my stories. I have been writing, when I get time, about my younger adventures and discovering who I am. I enjoy writing for the story telling., but my professional life is extremely busy so I don't get a lot of time. I know my stories ar...