All Comments on 'Coach Miller Ch. 01'

Dont be sorry for having an opinion. I did write that pretty quickly. Chapter 2 is short as well but by chapter three I feel the story really takes off. I hope you can hang in with it til then. Thanks for your feedback.

The story was very bad. It felt like you were rushing to write the story sorry but it was a huge turn off

Thank you so much for your comment. You are right. This one was a little fast. I learned how to add more detail later thanks to readers just like you, leaving good, helpful comments. I hope you enjoy the next chapters

For future reference...why so rushed? Seduction even with a willing partner to be, is a thing of art not wam bam thank you man; even if it is on a erotic website mainly trolled by men. So take your time and flesh it out build up the crescendo, let it off the boil and build up again just like a roller coaster.

twist on the butch coach...pretty well-endowed femme coach .. w/decided top/domme bent...

and suspect mom(single-?) no dummy...

Editing is in progress, please bare with me. Chapter 1 and 2 will be updated soon.

You had editing help and it was still this much of mess?

The 1st part was great then it went down hill

I am a hetero man, but this story of two VERY sexy women almost steamed up my glasses. Loved it!

really liked it ... very well done tho a little rushed ... i could have read another page or two of the seduction and lead-in to sex ... that was the best part for me ... nothing like two athletic ladies getting together :)