by Creamer
I've been checking back for a while to see if you had any new stories, and just found this one today. Great beginning... I definitely want to read more!!
Really good story. I actually read the whole thing without knowing it was Creamer who wrote it and thought I had a new favorite author. Keep up the good work. Looking forward to the next chapter.
You're one of my top two or three favorite writers here that I always check up on to see if they've posted anything new. Think this new one has very fun and interesting possibilities.
how much I enjoyed the story. You have the fifties ethics identified - that was my day and I'm just realizing how much we din't know. Thanks, and I'll read more of your stories!
You are one of my favorite writers! Thanks for sharing your talent.
and the 50's attitude. makes me wish that i'd been old enough to get some of that sweet 50's cunt instead of being born then. clever story and very hot!
You do have a good premise going here. Perhaps you cover this in later chapters, but one problem I have with the story is the motivation for your protagonist to have a pair of augmented balls and travel through time impregnating females. You need to explain the "why" other than merely alluding to a fertility problem in the future.
You also should take a little more time with the sex scenes. Yes, I know that to him it's just his job, but he should work their bodies more and be more descriptive with it even as his sadistic tendencies come out. I'll withhold final judgment until I've read a few more chapters.
but women don't come that many times especially after they have come once or hard.
Just to let you know. :)
I really am not a fan of time-travel but this is very well done! I read a comment here somewhere that "Women don't come that many times in real life" Some do!! Some women are like the energizer bunny. A repressed housewife of the 50's?! omgs! Not finding a technical error with that or the writing itself. Well done in both technical aspects and scene setting. I look forward to the rest of the story. Oh, and the way you have her repeating things and looking into his eyes is very, very sexy. A real turn on.
My wife cums 3-4 times a "session", and I have regular old balls. Maybe the number is a LITTLE inflated, but he does have a robo-cock afterall!
He's so honest about not being a nice man that it makes me laugh. No, it's not real so I don't pretend that but it still makes me laugh.
He started out treating her well. Never expected him to be so cruel. He had 3 other women in that time so why go back only to be cruel. How does his cruelty advance the story?
Lost me when he turned asshole. If that is the true him then won't the world be looking forward to a bazillion more of him?
While I'm one of those puritan feminists whose lust for violence is chanelled exclusively into revenge fantasies in which the rapist or the cop gets his brutal comeuppance, I thought that while the ending here was a huge turnoff it was also literarily apt, forcing us to confront the kernel of violence in this guy's sophisticated, decadent world... and our own. Sex controlled by the market—or some futuristic eugenic govt schemers is inherently violent.
hot until the end where he just changed his whole demeanor. turned me off :/
The sadist narrator could've been rougher and made her drink his cum(or something like that), but the end was disgusting in every sense of the term. Well, now I see there are other chapters as well to this story. Let me see if it's a continuation. It might actually work.
Awesome, sexy, hot ending. The little bitch gets what she deserves.
Well worded, good plot, and a lot of suspense. Made me cum! Keep writing. Now wonder this was a contest winner! (:
YOU TELL THIS STOREY SO WELL, THAT IS FEELS LIKE IT ACTUALLY IS HAPPENING OUT THERE RIGHT NOW. THE COLD COCKINESS OF YOUR ALTER EGO IS SO WONDERFUL AT HIS JOB THAT I CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHO ELSE HE SATISFIES. GREAT WRITING.
So many options ahead! Will be interesting to see how you lead us along on this interesting trail. It must work!
I've read this one twice. I try not to read the more violent or rapey non-consent stories, as they make me feel terrible. In order for me to read this category, there needs to be an out, an end around. Yours is my favorite so far. I actually read it as a science fiction story with good sex in it.
This is that rarest of things on Lit, a well-written story that I find myself falling into, undistracted by typos or grammatical errors. Your premise is compelling, your anti-hero thoroughly despicable, and I can't wait for more. :)
I need to find out where he is from and why he is going back in time and inseminating his grandmothers!
And there was. Thought I found this story through the New Stories area. :) Great, just read Ch.02 and thought I would correct my misassumption on Ch.01. Now heading to Ch.03 :)
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Interesting premise....kept me wondering where this guy came from (obviously in the future) and what their mission was all about? I'll have to check the other installments looking for answers. I have to admit that fucking the "All-American-Girl-Next-Door" type has always been a favorite -- and that she was.
That is really good writing, as well as being hot as hell.
I had to restrain myself, to remember that just because you don’t like a character in a story, you don’t underrate the story. In fact, if the author is able to make you *hate* one of his characters, he’s done a splendid job and deserves an even higher rating.
Character analyses aside, you are an excellent writer and that’s why I gave you 5 stars. Now I’m excited to read on and see what happens with Mrs. Amy Hunter!
I trust we won’t be disappointed.
... are not for me, well, not in that totally egoistical cruel fashion. I won’t read on. Also won’t rate you as I don’t like the storyline. Wouldn’t be fair.
Shorten this a bit.. great story!
I was intrigued and captivated by the story. It is well written though I enjoyed the traveller corrupting Sarah but felt bad after he raped her anally. But that's the thing... this falls under non consent/reluctance and most other stories avoid the moral dilemma of it being explicitly rape by throwing in a 'last minute' circumstance that makes the victim okay with it (like her being magically aroused by his dominance and power, wealth, sheer lust and curiousity etc). I liked that the story tells the story and didn't sugarcoat his actions to make him likeable.
Will see what the next chapters have but I am intrigued.
Read something very similar to this a while back. Almost too similar hmmmm..
the sort of story one can really dislike about a big headed arrogant twat probably based on the author
I was surprised Tom kinda turned into an asshole ( no pun intended ) toward the end.
I believe I would have enjoyed the story more if he had introduced Sarah to anal a little more enjoyably, for her.
Sayin’
Proper married women of the fifties didn't allow men that weren't their husbands into the house when the husband was away.