by cowboy109
Couldn't finish the first page. "Narrow waste; if she ware to ware a bikini". What the hell is wrong with you? Have you ever heard of an editor? Even if you did get one; they would probably throw this shit back at you and tell you to go back to school.
PLEASE, make the ratings go to ZERO!
Also handy would be if the rating "where" shown at the top of each submission, so people didn't "waist" time on garbage such as this.
The author needs to invest in a dictionary and thesarus. Find an editor before you inflict any more of this on the unsuspecting readers here at Lit.
I couldn't make it past the first few paragraphs. And, What, is, with, all the , commas.
please delete and get and editor and start over