All Comments on 'Coffee Shop Hero'

...: instead of 'come', you meant to type 'cum'. The 1st 1 you do when you're walking, the 2nd, you do when you're having sex. They sound alike but the 2nd 1 is a lot more fun to do.

way to go....great action!

This thing goes on and on and ......

Good story line.

Too disorganized and wanders all over the place.

this story kicked ass. i recomend it to every one and eny one, and i hope the author continues to write stories of this caliber.

What a delightful story! I enjoyed the way you gave texture to all the scenes. You also wrote the coupling interlude with both grace and sensitivity, showing a genuine affection for your characters.

I look forward to your next story.

I enjoyed the characters sensitivity towards their partners, and your discriptions.

This sentence struck me as being particularly ackward:

"And no girl I?ve ever been with has known to manipulate with her mound like this during foreplay." I understand what you are trying to say, but the flow is off, and it shook me right out of the story. :-)

This story was fun as well as sexy.That alone made it a 5 and whilst there were one or two little flaws they did not distract too much.

That was a pleasent and loverable story and nice job that you wrote...

I do believe I would of left the gas sation as-soon-as the police would of let me..no thanks necessary.

The idea of the Anonymous just before me would have killed the story. Why did he comment?

For me, it came to kind of an abrupt end.

Still, it was worth 5 stars.

Not as abrupt as the other one I read, Rainbow Club. However, that one was labeled Ch. 01, so I presume the author intended a sequel -- 14 years ago. Too bad.

The author has a sort-of warm, plain-life kind of writing, unlike some writers who seem pretentious or

status oriented.

Anyway, it's a style I like.

Paul in Oklahoma